The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:
“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument made by the author that the sale of land to Smith Corporation will damage the ecosystem for the 300 bird species that live in Youngtown Wildlife Preserve and will hence hamper the attraction of tourists who visit is a weak one and is based on a number of unwarranted assumptions. These assumptions will need to be addressed and corroborated if the author's position is to be considered strongly.
Author assumes that the sanctuary is essential to the bird species and that any tampering with it would directly impact the survival of these birds. No evidence is provided to explain what various features of the sanctuary are essential for the bird population and if the development of the planned hotel by the Smith Corporation will actually affect these particular features and hence the bird population. If the survival of the birds depended on a particular type pf climatic condition in the sanctuary and development of the hotel does not in any way tamper with the same then it would not affect the birds.
It is assumed by the author that the promise made by the Smith Corporation is a false one and that there is no way that their plans will not harm the sanctuary. It is possible that Smith Corporation have considered the details of their project and particularly their potential impacts on the sanctuary. They might have come up with a legitimate plan to preserve the sanctuary while building the hotel. This possibility is not examined by the author before concluding that their plans will be harmful for the sanctuary.
The main concern of the author is that the sale of this land will have no benefit for the community and instead have a negative impact as tourists would not be interested in visiting Youngtown. Author assumes here that the primary reason for the tourists to visit are the bird population in question and not any other attractiom within Youngtown. No evidence has been provided by the author to back this assumption. The author also assumes that the sale will have no benefits for the company. This assumption is an unwarranted one as building a hotel might actually attract more tourists by providing a living facility near the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve and hence benefiting the community.
Overall there are many assumptions made by the author in coming to a conclusion about the impact of the sale of land to the Smith Corporation on the sanctuary and on their community. He needs to examine all of these assumptions and provide evidence to back them if he wants to take a strong position against this sale.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2098 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.801 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.68 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.312 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.492 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.557 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e sale of land to Smith Corporation will damage the ecosystem for the 300 bird sp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, hence, if, so, then, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85354691076 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72799592822 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.391304347826 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5451181353 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.5625 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3125 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0625 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1591351363 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609047612685 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369935853556 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970497649405 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255934143136 0.0628817314937 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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