As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
If we take a quick tour into our daily lives, we will observe that technology has became an important part of our lives. Now, whether it is a good or bad impact, is still a matter of debate. The prompt here suggests that increasing reliance on technology has made human beings incapable of free thinking. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this recommendation and argue that technology is constantly adding to fuel to human’s thought process for _ reasons.
To begin with, if there was no enhancement of technology, our lives would have been the same as it was 100 years back. It is because of the technology that we can live life with better opportunities and luxuries. For instance, introduction of automobiles, computers, web net has made our life much easier and convenient than what we had thought in the early 20th century. But this would not have been possible if human beings didn’t give any thought about theses inventions. And it is with technology and human brains, that the new inventions are still roaring up. For example, the computers which were initially introduced used to take tons of hours just to open up. But with the collaborations of free thinking and technology, it not only just takes few seconds to open up but can also solve convoluted problems in seconds. Same with automobiles, when it was first introduced, it was quite unimaginable that in future there would be not only cars driven by electricity but also driver -less cars running on the roads. From this, we can clearly argue that reliance on technology does not make human beings less creative or their free-thinking process has been deteriorated.
Further, the advancement of technology in the form of web has helped us to access and create a lot of theories which would have otherwise, being impossible. For instance, students who are considered as the fresh and creative minds when get access to useful information any time and any where via internet, they can not only have a solid foundation for what they are studying but also can make a good future thesis about it. Along with that, we have also observed that how diseases with uncurable treatment are coming up with remedies. The greatest example of all-time, would-be cancer. It is a known fact that in most of the 20th century, people would accept death as their destiny if they had cancer. But with the invention of chemo therapy , doctors can affirm that even the most dangerous disease , cancer, can be treated . It would have not been possible if researchers would had not given constant effort along with the ever improving technology. This example illustrates my argument that yes technology is a big impact in our lives but the collaboration with human thinking has made the impossible thing possible.
Yes , it is possible to easily get swayed with the inventions of technology as it has made our lives convenient beyond our thinking . But it is not only technology that has led to such convenient lifestyles. In order to achieve the further impossible goals , technology will always be required but this can happen only with creative human mind.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...es, we will observe that technology has became an important part of our lives. Now, wh...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...human’s thought process for _ reasons. To begin with, if there was no enhanceme...
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Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: ANY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anywhere'?
Suggestion: anywhere
...cess to useful information any time and any where via internet, they can not only have a ...
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Line 3, column 742, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... But with the invention of chemo therapy , doctors can affirm that even the most d...
^^
Line 3, column 800, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...irm that even the most dangerous disease , cancer, can be treated . It would have ...
^^
Line 3, column 825, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ngerous disease , cancer, can be treated . It would have not been possible if rese...
^^
Line 3, column 881, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
... not been possible if researchers would had not given constant effort along with th...
^^^
Line 3, column 1042, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hnology is a big impact in our lives but the collaboration with human thinking ha...
^^
Line 4, column 4, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ade the impossible thing possible. Yes , it is possible to easily get swayed wit...
^^
Line 4, column 132, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...our lives convenient beyond our thinking . But it is not only technology that has ...
^^
Line 4, column 257, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... to achieve the further impossible goals , technology will always be required but ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, still, for example, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2580.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89563567362 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73964341336 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495256166983 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 801.9 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0435193555 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.5 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9583333333 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130803605801 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434288905849 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356159635018 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980952467401 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231877998822 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...es, we will observe that technology has became an important part of our lives. Now, wh...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...human’s thought process for _ reasons. To begin with, if there was no enhanceme...
^^
Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: ANY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anywhere'?
Suggestion: anywhere
...cess to useful information any time and any where via internet, they can not only have a ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 742, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... But with the invention of chemo therapy , doctors can affirm that even the most d...
^^
Line 3, column 800, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...irm that even the most dangerous disease , cancer, can be treated . It would have ...
^^
Line 3, column 825, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ngerous disease , cancer, can be treated . It would have not been possible if rese...
^^
Line 3, column 881, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
... not been possible if researchers would had not given constant effort along with th...
^^^
Line 3, column 1042, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hnology is a big impact in our lives but the collaboration with human thinking ha...
^^
Line 4, column 4, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ade the impossible thing possible. Yes , it is possible to easily get swayed wit...
^^
Line 4, column 132, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...our lives convenient beyond our thinking . But it is not only technology that has ...
^^
Line 4, column 257, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... to achieve the further impossible goals , technology will always be required but ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, still, for example, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2580.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89563567362 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73964341336 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495256166983 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 801.9 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0435193555 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.5 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9583333333 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130803605801 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434288905849 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356159635018 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980952467401 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231877998822 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.