The stated argument is baseless argument which lacks proper proofs and the statistical data. The reasoning done by author is not properly explaining the stated argument. The conclusions are drawn on the insufficient data and hence it is not cogent.
The author states that the Northeast areas of USA, it just states the area but not the specific number of bakeries in that area. The amount of the cellulose, glucose that the saccharin contains is not given and hence on what factors the comparison done between the sugar and the saccharin is not given. Sugar or Saccharin, which of them is cost-effective is also not stated in the given argument.
The 10% customers had grumbled about change, 10% of what amount is not stated in the given argument. Were the opinions of the people all types of age groups were taken into consideration? The people might be suffering from the severe diabetes who grumbled about the change. These people might have another health issues as well. The taste gets affected due to the saccharin is also not mentioned in the stated argument.
Besides when was this information gathered is also not given the argument. The valid or the main reason to substitute the sugar is also missing. The information given might be too old, and now the scenarios might have changed, that is the use of saccharin might have been proved to be detrimental. The weather conditions might play a huge role so, the fact that saccharin is used in Northeast areas of USA might be beneficial there. It is not necessary that it is beneficial for the other areas where there are Bagel Mania bakeries are there.
The stated argument lacks all proper reasoning of all the above stated points, it undermines the statement, that other branches of Bagel Mania bakeries must also use Saccharin as a substitute of sugar.
- The most ideal path for a society to set up its youngsters for positions of authority in government industry or different fields is by imparting in them a feeling of collaboration not rivalry Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you a 16
- Policies that focuses on protecting environment should not be imposed on multinational organizations as they generate profit and boost the economy even though they cause damage to the environment 50
- The following memorandum is from the manager of Bagel Mania Bakery Recently Bagel Mania replaced sugar with saccharin a sugar substitute throughout its bakeries in the Northeast areas of the USA Contrary to initial expectations this change did not have an 73
- Policies that focuses on protecting environment should not be imposed on multinational organizations as they generate profit and boost the economy even though they cause damage to the environment 58
- Because of television and worldwide computer connections people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited As a result tourism will soon become obsolete
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 30 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 311 350
No. of Characters: 1472 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.199 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.733 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.51 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.294 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.719 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...roperly explaining the stated argument. The conclusions are drawn on the insufficie...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ent data and hence it is not cogent. The author states that the Northeast areas ...
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Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ecific number of bakeries in that area. The amount of the cellulose, glucose that t...
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Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ght have been proved to be detrimental. The weather conditions might play a huge ro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 311.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87459807074 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57696530808 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459807073955 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.48776375 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1764705882 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2941176471 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.29411764706 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194648081782 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640943446233 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683188413074 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115395505684 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0827802071652 0.0628817314937 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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