It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
It is said that people should make decisions that have risks in their occupation and their own lives. In my opinion, although taking risks can lead to many drawbacks, i think advantages that it brings is more benefical.
On the one hand, taking risks can bring many economical value in their occupation. For instance, workers in factory are people who do not have high income to raise their family so that they decide to quit their job and then starting a business. This is risks because that can lead them to be poor but if they succeed in their business , they can raise their family and create job oppotunities for people. Moreover, their story can inspire for individuals who are afraid of taking decisions in their career. Even though that is a long- term journey for all people, i think they should try once in their life.
On the other hand, beside career aspects, personal life is important for individuals. To begin with, Taking risk can bring spirit and physical health. For example, people nowadays are more likely to be a couch potato, these just want to spend a thousand of hours sitting on their sofa. If they try to go outside to try something new such as a sport that they have not tried before. This will be interesting for them as they will find their interest and widen more relationships.
In conclusion, although taking a risk can bring drawbacks for many people, i believe that we should try to take risk at least one time in our life especially career and personal lives. Because that can help discover who we are and meaning of life.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...aking risks can lead to many drawbacks, i think advantages that it brings is more...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...or but if they succeed in their business , they can raise their family and create ...
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Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...is a long- term journey for all people, i think they should try once in their lif...
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Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...sk can bring drawbacks for many people, i believe that we should try to take risk...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, then, at least, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65342960289 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39534045982 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523465703971 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4712444619 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0714285714 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0714285714 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34254154228 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133277744335 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709365146194 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232317698719 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613215439547 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...aking risks can lead to many drawbacks, i think advantages that it brings is more...
^
Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...or but if they succeed in their business , they can raise their family and create ...
^^
Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...is a long- term journey for all people, i think they should try once in their lif...
^
Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...sk can bring drawbacks for many people, i believe that we should try to take risk...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, then, at least, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65342960289 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39534045982 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523465703971 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4712444619 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0714285714 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0714285714 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34254154228 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133277744335 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709365146194 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232317698719 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613215439547 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.