IELTS Academic Writing Task 1. Sample 2
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Three schematic drawings reflect the changes in the territory of West park Secondary School that occurred from 1950 to 2010. Overall, the Main Road lying along the inspected area remained unchanged while all the other segments on the map underwent significant alterations.
In 1950 territory consisted of four parts, namely, Houses, School, Farmland, Playground. Three decades later Farmland and Houses were replaced by Sports Fields and Car park as well as Science block respectively. The latter was added to the Main School building. The only segment which avoided changes was Playground.
In 2010 Car park became more than three times as big as it was before, by capturing the entire territory of Sports Fields. In its turn, Sports Fields area reduced approximately three times and moved to the right occupying third part of the previous Playground space. Thus, the Playground lost about 30% of its size. The School and attached to it Science block were not reconstructed.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Sports Fields area reduced approximately three times and moved to the right occup...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, third, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 827.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26751592357 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65833349813 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.636942675159 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7100782285 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.23603664747 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107381057157 0.215688989381 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463124375528 0.103423049105 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427552706816 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0765469268683 0.15604864568 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017752727201 0.0819641961636 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Sports Fields area reduced approximately three times and moved to the right occup...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, third, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 827.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26751592357 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65833349813 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.636942675159 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7100782285 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.23603664747 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107381057157 0.215688989381 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463124375528 0.103423049105 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427552706816 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0765469268683 0.15604864568 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017752727201 0.0819641961636 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.