It is evident that processed food and drink goods that contain high levels of sugar harmfully impact our health. Therefore, it is suggested to levy higher price for sugary products in order to reduce public sugar consumption. I strongly concur with the statement because the idea of making high sugar products more expensive can significantly change people's behavior and increase their health status.
To begin with, making people pay more on manufactured food and beverages that contain high levels of sugar will reduce the potential of the development of many chronic diseases such as obesity, diabetes mellitus and cardiovascular disease. This statement are confirmed by the study conducted in the USA that sweet diet was significantly associated with the raising incidents of obesity and type 2 diabetes mellitus. Additionally, the study also calculated the potential increase in cardiovascular disease cases related to the high number of obesity and diabetes mellitus. Thus, applying higher cost in sugary products will make people more selective in choosing their diet and hopefully can also reduce their sugar consumption.
Furthermore, imposing higher price in sugary products will also impact people preference in healthy products. A study in Indonesia revealed that taxing more in sugary products consequently increase the sale of wholesome products either those which priced cheaper or at the same price at 3 to 5%. This phenomenon shows positive impact of increasing unhealthy products price to the change in people's behavior and awareness in maintaining their health status. Thus, the government should considering more taxes on sugary products in order to make people choose healthy diet.
To sum up, imposing higher price in sugary meals and beverages can be very beneficial because it is not only preventing chronic diseases but also increasing public behavior and awareness about healthy diet.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...avior and awareness about healthy diet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52203389831 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78947420341 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505084745763 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5441911734 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.75 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301237212307 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122518763918 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735921747905 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181646314844 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101055197932 0.056905535591 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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