It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
In life, people cannot avoid trouble, so we need to learn to take risks both in our professional lives and personal lives. In my opinion, risks taking is a good mindset, it can help us complete a problem easily, take risks bring more benefit than drawbacks. In this essay, I will explain my opinion.
To begin with the short-comings of risks taking, we will talk about the drawback of this attitude in work. If people take risks but do not caculate carefully, they will create damages, for example, when a singer plan to shoot MV, they need to take risks like get troubles in weather, or a scene must record again and again. So if they let their risks repeat many time, their loss can raise to a large number of cost. Next, we come to the demerits of this mindset in daily life, that is it can make people focus in risks and the defeat, therefore, people will be fear of start and do anything. For instance, a student have a passion for drawing and she want to entrance exam to art university but she see many risks and so she decide to miss it and choose a safer industry.
However, we can have many merits from accept risks. It help us avoid disappoinment and discouragement when we have defeat. As an example, when someone get troubles in their job but they have the mindset of accept risks, they will not shock and disappoint, they anticipate risks that will occur. Besides, people need to gain more knowledge about the thing they do because if they gain not enough knowlegde, they cannot know anout the risks they will encounter. Like a group of student go into the forest to learn about mushroom must have enough knowledge about mushroom which they will meet, otherwise they will be poisoned. In addition, we can see that people who accept risks will able to improvise and adapt well. For example, a leader accept risks can adapt well in many different situations then they can lead their member the best way.
In conclusion, take risks have both 2 sides merits and demerits but the advantages are outweigh the disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...isks bring more benefit than drawbacks. In this essay, I will explain my opinion. ...
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Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
... benefit than drawbacks. In this essay, I will explain my opinion. To begin wi...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...peat many time, their loss can raise to a large number of cost. Next, we come to the demerits of ...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...dent have a passion for drawing and she want to entrance exam to art university but ...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'sees'.
Suggestion: sees
...entrance exam to art university but she see many risks and so she decide to miss it...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
...rsity but she see many risks and so she decide to miss it and choose a safer industry....
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Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...ave defeat. As an example, when someone get troubles in their job but they have the...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...a leader accept risks can adapt well in many different situations then they can lead their mem...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
...its and demerits but the advantages are outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 7.85571142285 306% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61263736264 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40020446287 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497252747253 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1809334047 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.9375 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5625 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29368120767 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106667487782 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.091573252402 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225704114308 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765007666914 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.