Which do you think is better for the environment to build fewer factories or to create more wildlife preservation areas

Submitted by Fifi13 on Thu, 10/31/2024 - 13:45

The environment is defined as our entourage in a whole. The oxygen that we bread, the forests, our homes and everything that contributes in human's existence. since human felt the importance of preserving environment he starts to advocate setting a protecting mesures and laws that all countries must respect and adopt such as duild a fewer factories and creat more wildlife preservation areas. In this essay I will discus the importance of wildlife preservation areas since it is in my opinion more effective and logical for many reasons.
firstly, wildlife preserfation areas help in protecting a lot of animal species engendering extraction because of humain attitude, exploitiing forest led to a few forest that still served as an habitat for some animals. In this areas we can see different kind of birds, animals, and rare plants, thus, providing an educational aspect serving in teaching next generations about some species that they would never see, thanks to this preservation areas.
secondly, wildlife preservation areas can be served for scientific experiments such as learning the specific caracteristics of an environment an species need to survive and multiplicate. Furthermore, this areas can help scientists in having acces to different creatures and proceed experiements right the way.
Lastely, these wildlife preservation areas can have an economical advantage. many preservations are used todays as an amusement place where people can pay for a visit and a beneficial and educational experiment.
In conclusion, while building a few factories can help in protecting the envirnment by producing less toxic gases, and less nocif products that most factories throw in the ocean. This proposition still not applicable because of the hectic economical competition between countries and the ascending demand of different products. The building of a wildlife preservation areas is in my opinion the logical and applicable solution for envirnment's problems.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...g that contributes in humans existence. since human felt the importance of preserving...
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Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...dlife preservation areas. In this essay I will discus the importance of wildlife ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Firstly
...ffective and logical for many reasons. firstly, wildlife preserfation areas help in pr...
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Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun forest seems to be countable; consider using: 'few forests'.
Suggestion: few forests
...n attitude, exploitiing forest led to a few forest that still served as an habitat for som...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 192, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ed to a few forest that still served as an habitat for some animals. In this areas...
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Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...rved as an habitat for some animals. In this areas we can see different kind of bird...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...ee, thanks to this preservation areas. secondly, wildlife preservation areas can be ser...
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ecific caracteristics of an environment an species need to survive and multiplicat...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... survive and multiplicate. Furthermore, this areas can help scientists in having acc...
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Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this wildlife' or 'these wildlifes'?
Suggestion: this wildlife; these wildlifes
...d experiements right the way. Lastely, these wildlife preservation areas can have an economic...
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Suggestion: Many
...areas can have an economical advantage. many preservations are used todays as an amu...
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Line 5, column 307, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en countries and the ascending demand of different products. The building of a wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51485148515 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13276603123 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554455445545 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.96906069 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.538461538 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286116114411 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103394941563 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785273305081 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156929043064 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615823731405 0.0645574589148 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...g that contributes in humans existence. since human felt the importance of preserving...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...dlife preservation areas. In this essay I will discus the importance of wildlife ...
^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Firstly
...ffective and logical for many reasons. firstly, wildlife preserfation areas help in pr...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun forest seems to be countable; consider using: 'few forests'.
Suggestion: few forests
...n attitude, exploitiing forest led to a few forest that still served as an habitat for som...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 192, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ed to a few forest that still served as an habitat for some animals. In this areas...
^^
Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...rved as an habitat for some animals. In this areas we can see different kind of bird...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...ee, thanks to this preservation areas. secondly, wildlife preservation areas can be ser...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ecific caracteristics of an environment an species need to survive and multiplicat...
^^
Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... survive and multiplicate. Furthermore, this areas can help scientists in having acc...
^^^^
Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this wildlife' or 'these wildlifes'?
Suggestion: this wildlife; these wildlifes
...d experiements right the way. Lastely, these wildlife preservation areas can have an economic...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 77, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
...areas can have an economical advantage. many preservations are used todays as an amu...
^^^^
Line 5, column 307, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en countries and the ascending demand of different products. The building of a wi...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51485148515 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13276603123 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554455445545 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.96906069 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.538461538 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286116114411 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103394941563 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785273305081 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156929043064 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615823731405 0.0645574589148 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.