Which do you think is better for the environment, to build fewer factories or to create more wildlife preservation areas?
Toay's modern contemprary world requires large number of machines, factories, mills, power plants to
fulfill aspirations of people with never ending desires. Very few people
can think of ending their extravagant lifestyle,hence I believe that curtailing number of
estlablished factories is not prudent option, instead planning wild life sancturies is logical solution
to save large number of species of fauna. I would like to throw light on my opinion
in the following essays:
To begin with, reducing number of factories linked with giving up privileges to live a comfortable life.
Whole world is facing the problem of exploding population, even with natural calamities such as hurricane, tornadoes and earthquake the population density is consistent. Due to the fact that educated people are better equipped to use technology to enhance their wellbeing. In order to satisfy desires and basic necessities of human beings it is imperative to construct factories to form goods such as clothes, food products, and other commodities. Similarly, the rate of employment might rise as factories provide job to large number of people living in suburbans. However, to reduce negative consequences of smoke on the habitat of animals; location of factories should be chosen wisely and stringent measures should be imposed on owners to reduce air and water pollution.
Another reason that deserves attention is, separate habitat for wild life might eliminate pollution of air, land, water and other human that threatens the population of wild life. In fact some people are fond of hunting
rare species resulting in complete depletion of that particular species, thus disturbing the balance in ecosystem.
Life of species in different ecosystem is interlinked, if prey dies out then the number of predators might collapse due to
lack of adequate resources of food. For instance, number of cat and mice will be intrigued if either one species become extinct.To alleviate these issues steps should be undertaken by regional environmental department to build homes for animals and hire volunteers to expediate this philanthropic task. In addition, enough land on this planet is available to create habitat suitable for the wild life where the can live peacefully without intrigued by human activity; eliminating need to destroy the factories. As a consequence, wild life sanctuaries are imperative to deter large number of species from extinction and give opportunity for environmentalist to perform research and development.
To sum up, opening up chains of sanctuaries across the globe couple with myriad benefits for animals such
as maintaining number of species, breeding and research and development to preserve species.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, similarly, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52380952381 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9639213775 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590476190476 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.420435327 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.666666667 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 14.0 4.53405017921 309% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101711124311 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0316022438671 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250329051909 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0267967066186 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283130338066 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 11.7677419355 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.99 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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