Working life is part of our life and everyone will have to experience it regardless of the educational background. There is argument on the hotly debated issue as to whether a person should work in the same organization until he or she retired or should he or she change the job after working for a period of time. I would like to discuss the issue from a variety of perspectives.
Some people think that it makes no difference even if they work for the other organization. The reason is simple because their jobs provide them job satisfaction. When a job provides a comfortable working environment, the salary is enough to support the life and the person feels comfortable with the job scope, he or she is rarely likely to change the job. This is because the job provides them security. They do not have to worry they will be fired one day when their boss is satisfied with their job performance. As for some of the workers who are the bread winners for their family, they do not have to worry their salaries are not able to cover the monthly expenditures when there is an increment every year. When their colleagues are friendly and helpful, they will not think of changing jobs as they would like to learn more from them and contribute to the company.
In contrast, some people think that working for different organizations are better for their careers. In my opinion, it is undoubted that this is one of the ways to enhance our standards of living. This is because when a company head-hunted an employee of other company, this means the boss of that company is looking for somebody who is intelligent and has problem-solving skill to deal with the problems the company is facing. In such a situation, the pay of the job will certainly be higher. This would suit the needs of a person who wants to have higher standards of living. For instance, the turnover rate of an audit firm is higher compared to other field as the auditor always has to work overtime with the excessive workloads. To make the life easier, the auditor will resign and work for a company who would offer higher pay and has lower volume of workloads.
Therefore, it depends wholly on the person’s point of view in term of the needs to determine whether to work for the same organization or change the job. Primarily, if the job offers job satisfaction and the person feels secure working for the organization, there is no reason for him or her to change as changing a new job means the person has to learn everything all over again. Besides, he or she has to adapt to the new working environment and make new friends. It takes time for the transition.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Working life is part of our life and eve...
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Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... is argument on the hotly debated issue as to whether a person should work in the same organi...
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Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'changes'.
Suggestion: changes
...l he or she retired or should he or she change the job after working for a period of t...
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Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... she change the job after working for a period of time. I would like to discuss the issue from...
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Line 3, column 525, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...fied with their job performance. As for some of the workers who are the bread winners for t...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'therefore', 'as for', 'as to', 'for instance', 'in contrast', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.215415019763 0.247107548796 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.173913043478 0.15552993741 112% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0652173913043 0.0946569551029 69% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0355731225296 0.0501201869031 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0691699604743 0.0437536398559 158% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118577075099 0.122223957237 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0237154150198 0.0403219363162 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.64584075711 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0434782608696 0.0326786765898 133% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.128458498024 0.0861751148067 149% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0217391304348 0.0214082191602 102% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0177865612648 0.0119246538136 149% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2649.0 1933.38276553 137% => OK
No of words: 471.0 316.052104208 149% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61228813559 6.10592293882 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.20519365927 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.282377919321 0.37474360046 75% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.212314225053 0.284197041944 75% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.138004246285 0.203843217982 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0934182590234 0.137313986986 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64584075711 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420382165605 0.560935902166 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.7240190252 60.7401812628 77% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0911823647 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.4285714286 20.7725350517 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8039536031 49.5273876611 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.067073171 93.4120437189 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1036585366 15.2821509519 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.469512195122 0.594174754866 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01102204409 100% => OK
Readability: 43.6599939339 49.1922392462 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.28368794326 1.69127372897 76% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.345327947385 0.332604825255 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.152379584905 0.102734651613 148% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10000476128 0.0668474354756 150% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.545846407874 0.534917948617 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.151124541796 0.148666948902 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148732532024 0.13441755203 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706863058302 0.0742828286743 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.474893449379 0.324241079732 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0442188817329 0.0640056729886 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255125538334 0.22793763319 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246796166487 0.0582452615562 42% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.68436873747 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41883767535 175% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.88977955912 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.60220440882 115% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.00200400802 300% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 10.493987976 181% => OK
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Rates: 71.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 6.5 Out of 9