Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and example to support your answer.
There is no doubt that with advancement is technoloy, it has become one of the important aspect in our life. In each corner in our house there is on device that people use. From T.V. sets, fans and cell phones to dishwashers, washer machiens and dryers. Although some people assert that technology made childrens more creative than they were in the past, technology have made children less creative than their previous generations. The basis for my views is because the technology limited children physical and mental activities.
With the development of T.V, children are more attracted to T.V progrmams rather than their studies. T.V's provide different games, movies, and programs that attract children from a variety of age. Childrens can get attached to T.V from their young age. As a result, they grow-up as a reciever for information not a creater for it. Of course, T.V can enrich their knowledge and information by exposing the children to a wild variety of topic and subject. However, the limited physical and mental excersise hult creativity skills in the childrens. For example, my brother was addicted to T.V. Each day after school he used to watch his T.V showes and programs for at least eight hours. As a result, he turned to couch botato. Moreover, his ability to create or process new information is limited. Thus, limiting our creativity is on of the disadvantages that T.V can pose to our children.
In addation to The T.V. cars is another significant factor that limites children creativity and imaginations. Nowaday's, childrens are more relay on cars as the only source of transportation. Children can go to the supermarket, school and library with their parents instead of public transportations. However, If they take public transportation insted of cars, they have a greater chance to meet with other people, discover different places and spending more time away from their parents. Talking to different people and seeing different cities will significantly enrich their both creativity and communication skills.
As a conclusion, we can safely say that even though Technology can add tremendous positive effect on our children by offering a convenience and knowledge, over using technology can pose threat to children creativity. Children need to balance between the utilizing technology and different activities in order to make the balance.
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with advancement is technoloy,
with advancement in technoloy,
From T.V. sets,
From TV sets,
technology have made
technologies have made
T.V's provide different games,
TVs provide different games,
Sentence: As a result, they grow-up as a reciever for information not a creater for it.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to they and grow-up
cars is another significant factor
car is another significant factor
discover different places and spending more time
discover different places and spend more time
Sentence: In addation to The T.V. cars is another significant factor that limites children creativity and imaginations.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and creativity
Sentence: As a conclusion, we can safely say that even though Technology can add tremendous positive effect on our children by offering a convenience and knowledge, over using technology can pose threat to children creativity.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and creativity
Sentence: There is no doubt that with advancement is technoloy, it has become one of the important aspect in our life.
Error: technoloy Suggestion: technology
Sentence: From T.V. sets, fans and cell phones to dishwashers, washer machiens and dryers.
Error: machiens Suggestion: machines
Sentence: Although some people assert that technology made childrens more creative than they were in the past, technology have made children less creative than their previous generations.
Error: childrens Suggestion: children
Sentence: With the development of T.V, children are more attracted to T.V progrmams rather than their studies.
Error: progrmams Suggestion: programs
Sentence: As a result, they grow-up as a reciever for information not a creater for it.
Error: reciever Suggestion: receiver
Error: creater Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, the limited physical and mental excersise hult creativity skills in the childrens.
Error: hult Suggestion: hunt
Error: childrens Suggestion: children
Error: excersise Suggestion: exercise
Sentence: For example, my brother was addicted to T.V. Each day after school he used to watch his T.V showes and programs for at least eight hours.
Error: showes Suggestion: shows
Sentence: As a result, he turned to couch botato.
Error: botato Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In addation to The T.V. cars is another significant factor that limites children creativity and imaginations.
Error: addation Suggestion: addition
Sentence: Nowaday's, childrens are more relay on cars as the only source of transportation.
Error: childrens Suggestion: children
Sentence: However, If they take public transportation insted of cars, they have a greater chance to meet with other people, discover different places and spending more time away from their parents.
Error: insted Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: ? in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1936 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.99 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.866 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.371 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.409 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.458 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ctivities. With the development of T.V, children are more attracted to T.V pro...
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...tion not a creater for it. Of course, T.V can enrich their knowledge and informat...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'at least', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'of course', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.288056206089 0.229887763892 125% => OK
Verbs: 0.124121779859 0.158761421928 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0772833723653 0.0866891130778 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0374707259953 0.046263068375 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0585480093677 0.0685040099705 85% => OK
Prepositions: 0.131147540984 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0304449648712 0.0351676179071 87% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.89656300201 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0374707259953 0.0309702414327 121% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0679156908665 0.0887237588012 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0187353629977 0.0209618222197 89% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00468384074941 0.0139019557991 34% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2382.0 2387.08602151 100% => OK
No of words: 381.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.25196850394 5.86048508987 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.404199475066 0.338922669872 119% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.309711286089 0.251872472559 123% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.233595800525 0.174417080927 134% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136482939633 0.112833075102 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89656300201 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54593175853 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 61.2731568433 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.24 20.5533526081 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1904058046 48.84282405 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.28 120.699889404 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.24 20.5533526081 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.644075263715 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.54480286738 198% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.2111286089 45.7405998639 101% => OK
Elegance: 2.04255319149 1.45489161554 140% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335273600131 0.300154397459 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0801521195017 0.103427244359 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0700121690414 0.0752933317313 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.399816032985 0.497263757937 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150299422561 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107352461325 0.114077575197 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794398589967 0.0781384742642 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.343214427028 0.336927656856 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0706122244016 0.067059652881 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233947242006 0.210909579961 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626931635305 0.0618886996521 101% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.91756272401 244% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
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Rates: 66 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20 Out of 30
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