The Director of student housing argues for construction of new attractive dormitories for students in Buckingham college but does not enough persuasive evidence to substantiate his claim.
Director is of the view that Buckingham’s enrollment is growing and is going to double in coming fifty years. Considering this the existing dormitories will be insufficient in coming years. However, if this trend is likely to continue is like this is a matter which need to be given a thought. Fifty years is a long time and a lot of changes can happen in these years. The enrollment in a college is dependent upon a number of factors including the ranking, reputation of professors, research environment, job placement scenario etc. These factors are likely to change in coming years affecting the enrollment rate at5 Buckingham. If a new college opens is town with better ranking, faculties etc. the enrollment at Buckingham will probably go down, rendering the dormitories useless.
Director further assumes that the students will prefer dormitories over apartments outside university. However, no argument is provided to support this claim. Students may prefer outside university apartments as they provide more freedom, Easy travelling accessibility etc. A proper representative survey should be conducted to draw any conclusion regarding their preference.
Director goes on to say that rent of apartments outside university are increasing, however if this likely to continue in future is imponderable. Rent prices are related to the property prices which can fluctuate a lot in a short period of time. Moreover id the rent prices are high students can rent an apartment in suburbs or share the apartment so that the burden of rent is distributed.
In the final argument author claims that attractive dormitories will attract more students at Buckingham. Conclusion seems naïve as the enrollment rate is dependent upon a lot of factors and attractiveness of dormitory, at best, would be secondary criterion to choose a university.
Conclusively, director of housing does not provide substantial cogent arguments to support his recommendation. With each enumerated argument being potentially unwarranted, the conclusion which is based upon this argument will not be tenable.
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- To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. 83
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'second', 'so']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.296103896104 0.25644967241 115% => OK
Verbs: 0.176623376623 0.15541462614 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0883116883117 0.0836205057962 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0285714285714 0.0520304965353 55% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0103896103896 0.0272364105082 38% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119480519481 0.125424944231 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0467532467532 0.0416121511921 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.17063273367 2.79052419416 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0311688311688 0.026700313972 117% => OK
Particles: 0.0025974025974 0.001811407834 143% => OK
Determiners: 0.103896103896 0.113004496875 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0285714285714 0.0255425247493 112% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0103896103896 0.0127820249294 81% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2298.0 2731.13054187 84% => OK
No of words: 352.0 446.07635468 79% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 6.52840909091 6.12365571057 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.443181818182 0.378187486979 117% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.34375 0.287650121315 120% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.275568181818 0.208842608468 132% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.184659090909 0.135150697306 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17063273367 2.79052419416 114% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 207.018472906 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502840909091 0.469332199767 107% => OK
Word variations: 52.8894334785 52.1807786196 101% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6 23.2022227129 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2185675461 57.7814097925 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.9 141.986410481 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 23.2022227129 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.724660767414 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 51.975 51.9672348444 100% => OK
Elegance: 2.14457831325 1.8405768891 117% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384396807272 0.441005458295 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0893127010689 0.135418324435 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.081272468043 0.0829849096947 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.535253310186 0.58762219726 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.169225451574 0.147661913831 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135198165003 0.193483328276 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683558562293 0.0970749176394 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.18023229196 0.42659136922 42% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0183159059127 0.0774707102158 24% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205650729171 0.312017818177 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779809489486 0.0698173142475 112% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
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Rates: 83.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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