61. People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences.
The author contends that when people make a risky decision, it should be out of scrupulous consideration regarding the outcome of the act that a person is willing to take. Many would say that the determination that is made from careful consideration will not make a person regret over what he or she chose to do. So, it is a must for people when taking risky actions. However, the following essay will argue that it is plausible to disagree with the author's statement. Risky actions should not be always from consideration with careful mind. The action should be made according to what kind of situation the person is situated in.
Admittingly, careful consideration prevents a person from making irrational decisions. The consideration helps the decision making process to evade mistakes that they could have made immediately. When people make choices without considering the consequences, just hoping for the immediate effect that they are willing to enjoy, there could be serious impacts in the long run. For instance, several years ago, "Iriver", a first brand that introduced MP3 to the world, was in such a huge demand and the stock price was so high for each share. Therefore, people bought the shares since it looked like it's speed of growth is accelerating. However, due to a strong competitor rising in the market, Apple, Iriver suddenly disappeared in the acoustics market. As seen from this instance, there are times that careful consideration considering its long-run effect should be made when making risky decisions.
However, risky decisions are to be made when it is related to human lives. This is where the thinking process should be delineated. When a human life is at stake, careful consideration whether he or she should save the person or not hampers the chances of saving a person. For instance, ferry Sewol in South Korea a few years ago submerged in the sea and led many students and teachers into death. If the rescuers, whose objective being saving the people inside the submerging ship, were told immediately from the upper government officials, the people inside could have all been saved. However, the consideration made that elongated the rescuing time risked many lives.
Thus, risky action should be made according to which situation he or she is at. When a long-run effect is to be considered and is important, careful thinking before making a decision should be taken. However, when it is a situation that is directly related to saving a person's life, risky action such as saving a person in a dangerous environment should be made at the very moment.
In summary, I believe that not every.action should be made out of thinking carefully. There are times when it is unnecessary. There are situations that immediate decision is important and serious consideration is in need for making a decision. It is the decision maker's own perspective of how he or she looks at the situation being critical in a risky situation.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The fourth paragraph is like a conclusion paragraph which is duplicated to the fifth paragraph.
There should be a new argument in the fourth paragraph.
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The better way to make arguments is: always supporting or against one side , like this:
paragraph 1: introduction. Suppose we support side A.
paragraph 2: reason 1 + why reason 1 + example of reason 1 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1).
paragraph 3: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example of reason 2 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 2 or comparisons if not reason 2).
paragraph 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. First, ... Second, .... However, there is no causation/relation.... I still support side A...
paragraph 5: conclusion -- reinforce the thesis.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 493 350
No. of Characters: 2403 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.712 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.729 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.962 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.356 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 451, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...at it is plausible to disagree with the authors statement. Risky actions should not be ...
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Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chers into death. If the rescuers, whose objective being saving the people inside...
^^
Line 7, column 270, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...on that is directly related to saving a persons life, risky action such as saving a per...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 383, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment should be made at the very moment. In summary, I believe that not every.ac...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 27, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... moment. In summary, I believe that not every.action should be made out of t...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for instance', 'in summary', 'kind of', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.211956521739 0.240241500013 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.199275362319 0.157235817809 127% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0851449275362 0.0880659088768 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0452898550725 0.0497285424764 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0380434782609 0.0444667217837 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.103260869565 0.12292977631 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0742753623188 0.0406280797675 183% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.87854128725 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0235507246377 0.030933414821 76% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0996376811594 0.0997080785238 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0307971014493 0.0249443105267 123% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0344202898551 0.0148568991511 232% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2975.0 2732.02544248 109% => OK
No of words: 493.0 452.878318584 109% => OK
Chars per words: 6.03448275862 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377281947262 0.366273622748 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.245436105477 0.280924506359 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184584178499 0.200843997647 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.129817444219 0.132149295362 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87854128725 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 219.290929204 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452332657201 0.48968727796 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.4995499886 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6194690265 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.9615384615 23.380412469 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4883600986 59.4972553346 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.423076923 141.124799967 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9615384615 23.380412469 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.461538461538 0.674092028746 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 43.5051490092 51.4728631049 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.37820512821 1.64882698954 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110304408098 0.391690518653 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0978865588969 0.123202303941 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0723388216373 0.077325440228 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.488124456374 0.547984918172 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14240802755 0.149214159877 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046151820817 0.161403998019 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398887097644 0.0892212321368 45% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.43985673506 0.385218514788 114% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0538992391926 0.0692045440612 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0785857389735 0.275328986314 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019999532903 0.0653680567796 31% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.30420353982 226% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 12.0 3.66592920354 327% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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