The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Somepeople think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast foodoutlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health.
To what extent do you agree with these views?
The population of children who get the obesity problem in advanced countries shows an increase in recent years. Some believe that this phenomenon is caused by the increasing number of fast-food restaurants while some argue that the main reason may be related to parents who lack enough attention on their children’s diet. Personally, I totally agree with the last perspective.
Admittedly, amounts of fast-food restaurants in cities provide children with convenience for eating unhealthy food. However, the careless of parents should be the most vital factor.
Firstly, most of parents are busy on their own career now. They have to work in companies for a whole day, lacking sufficient time for cooking for their children, especially when they have to work overtime at night. For these parents, they even do not have time to cook for themselves, let alone their children. In this way, children have to go outside, eating those fast foods, such as fried chicken and chips, which are delicious but unhealthy.
Besides, children do not go to fast-food restaurants as soon as they were born. In other words, healthy eating habits begin early in life, long before children start to visit fast-food outlets. If parents can cultivate their children’s eating habits in daily lives instead of giving them a lot of pocket money for buying chocolates, children may prefer to choose vegetables rather than fatty foods.
In conclusion, the rising number of fast food outlets may affect children’s diet to some extent; I consider that the insufficient attention of parents should be the primary factor.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the parents') or simply say ''most parents''.
Suggestion: most of the parents; most parents
...d be the most vital factor. Firstly, most of parents are busy on their own career now. They ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'while', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235880398671 0.247107183377 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.159468438538 0.155533422707 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.093023255814 0.0946595960268 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0664451827243 0.0501214627716 133% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0431893687708 0.0437548338989 99% => OK
Prepositions: 0.132890365449 0.122226691241 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0431893687708 0.0403226058552 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78570019805 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0299003322259 0.0326793684256 91% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0664451827243 0.0861772015684 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0199335548173 0.021408717616 93% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0132890365449 0.011925033212 111% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1617.0 1933.35771543 84% => OK
No of words: 258.0 316.048096192 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.26744186047 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20517956788 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.403100775194 0.374742101984 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282945736434 0.28420135186 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.197674418605 0.203846283523 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131782945736 0.137316102897 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78570019805 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.037074148 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624031007752 0.56093040696 111% => OK
Word variations: 68.1295399789 60.7387585426 112% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0891783567 81% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8461538462 20.7743622355 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9768286961 49.517814964 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.384615385 127.492653851 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8461538462 20.7743622355 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.923076923077 0.814263465372 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 48.1407274896 49.1944974215 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.53086419753 1.69124875643 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.488644105589 0.332605444948 147% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.127654970117 0.102741220458 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0937751041109 0.0668466124924 140% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.589147241128 0.534860350844 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.17968390379 0.148594505496 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18219729127 0.134430193775 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762396662327 0.0742795772207 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.250627058968 0.324371583561 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0639782157452 0.0638462369009 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290012374596 0.228012699653 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578401330955 0.058150111329 99% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.68436873747 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 5.90881763527 68% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.