The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Young people are the leaders of tomorrow. They are the ones who are going to lead and run the world in the near future. But to train them for this task, it is responsibility of people who are in leadership today. As the issue suggests, best way to prepare young people today is by teaching them the art of cooperaion, and not competition. Many may not agree with this, but in my opinion, this is possibly the best way possible to prepare the young minds.
To start with, the world today is full of competitors who are struggling alone in their life in order to do better and better each day. Nobody wants to cooperate with others. Everyone is busy in their own well being. Which is not a good way progress. For example, there are 5 people working on a project. Everyone is assigned a task to complete. Now, the problem is, everyone is working alone to finish their task faster than others so that they can take most of the credit, which in my opinion, is not feasible. Instead, if they can work collectively and help each other to accomplish their tasks, the work will be done much faster and in much better way with new innovaions and better execution.
Secondly, in the field of politics, the government of each country is competing with other country without being concerned about others. Everyone is in the race to develop faster without thinking about the others. As a result, no country is perfect. Everyone has their own set of flaws. On the other hand, if the developed and undeveloped countries join hand and try to work collectively, they can accomplish much better results and a better world for the humans to live.
Moreover, in the field of industry, suppose there are five companies which are providing technical solution services to various companies who need them. Each company has their own positive and negative points in terms of services provided. If all of these solution services join hands and could make a single product which is master of all trades, they can make a much better revenue and the collecive effort will be paid off.
Furthermore, if we even check upon the society we live in, people are becoming selfish and are only concerned about their own well being. The rich are becoming richer and poor is becoming poorer with every passing day. If the rich could help the poor in any possible way to let them rise, provide them jobs, eduction etcetera, the world will be a much better way to live in.
On the other hand, competition is not always harmful. Competition gives a sense of betterment. People push themselves to the limits and try to do their best in the most effective and efficient manner and results in great output.
So, to conclude, instead of just competiting, we should also introduce a sense of cooperation in the young generation. It will definitely give trememdous results in the near future in all the fields. So, the opinions and examples substantiate my opinion about the given issue that the best way to prepare youngs is by instilling them in a sense of cooperation, not competition.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 62
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...art of cooperaion, and not competition. Many may not agree with this, but in my opinion,...
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...eryone is busy in their own well being. Which is not a good way progress. For example...
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Suggestion:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'for example', 'as a result', 'in my opinion', 'to start with', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21608040201 0.240241500013 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.164154103853 0.157235817809 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0887772194305 0.0880659088768 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0569514237856 0.0497285424764 115% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0469011725293 0.0444667217837 105% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115577889447 0.12292977631 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0385259631491 0.0406280797675 95% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.55119577409 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0335008375209 0.030933414821 108% => OK
Particles: 0.00167504187605 0.0016655270985 101% => OK
Determiners: 0.0988274706868 0.0997080785238 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0201005025126 0.0249443105267 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0117252931323 0.0148568991511 79% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3055.0 2732.02544248 112% => OK
No of words: 535.0 452.878318584 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71028037383 6.0361032391 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.299065420561 0.366273622748 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.226168224299 0.280924506359 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.158878504673 0.200843997647 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.100934579439 0.132149295362 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55119577409 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 219.290929204 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45046728972 0.48968727796 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.5687026904 55.4138127331 95% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6194690265 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.8333333333 23.380412469 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1201709727 59.4972553346 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.833333333 141.124799967 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 23.380412469 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.533333333333 0.674092028746 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.94800884956 141% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 40.4501557632 51.4728631049 79% => OK
Elegance: 1.38125 1.64882698954 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451021109355 0.391690518653 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0962788614704 0.123202303941 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.079665968741 0.077325440228 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.500600377954 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16616063886 0.149214159877 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151269099344 0.161403998019 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854287832974 0.0892212321368 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.349732307896 0.385218514788 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.096722834709 0.0692045440612 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274810434335 0.275328986314 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.098162515187 0.0653680567796 150% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88274336283 225% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.70907079646 295% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.