The majority of people who are in their early to mid-twenties think that children’s playing computer games should not be allowed because it is a waste of time. They support that when children are playing the games, there is nothing to learn from the games. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should not be thought about in a different light. I believe that children’s playing games should be allowed in order to relieve their stress and make their lives more effective and convenient.
First of all, children’s playing computer games enables them to relieve their accumulated stress. To be specific, children should be allowed to play computer games, which makes better manage stress, maintain health, and build a quality life. Stress is the main cause of disease, shorter life span, and dissatisfying life in general. As such, people in modern society should actively find ways to reduce stress levels and stay healthy. For example, when I was in elementary school, teachers gave me a lot of home-works in order to improve my abilities. It was helpful for me to improve my abilities. However, it makes me stressful when I was doing home-works. At that time, there was one way to reduce my stress. It was to play a computer game, called “worms”. I could relieve my stress while playing this game. Through this experience, I learned that children’s playing computer games is not a waste of their time and they should be allowed to play the games in order to relieve stress and stay healthy.
Moreover, playing computer games is not a waste of time because it makes children’s lives more effective and convenient. In addition, children’s playing the games allows them to learn how to effectively utilize their limited time. In today’s fast-paced world, people are required to take use of their time and build relationships with others. People can do this better by playing computer games online. For instance, according to a study done by the New York Times, it revealed that playing computer games is beneficial for children to utilize their time and be more effective and convenient. The study indicated that during playing computer games, children are able to meet a lot of players in the game and build relationships with them in short time. Also, as they participated in the same group, they are likely to indirectly experience each other’s valuable information which could use in the real world. Children who are playing the games makes their lives more effective and convenient.
To sum up, I believe that children’s playing games should be allowed and not a waste of time : relieving stress and making their lives more effective and convenient. All things I have mentioned, it is my belief that my argument regarding this topic has been effectively and precisely delivered with the reasons.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in general', 'in short', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244288224956 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.188049209139 0.158761421928 118% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0579964850615 0.0866891130778 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0386643233743 0.046263068375 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0720562390158 0.0685040099705 105% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0896309314587 0.118717715034 75% => OK
Participles: 0.0527240773286 0.0351676179071 150% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91438881599 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0369068541301 0.0309702414327 119% => OK
Particles: 0.00175746924429 0.00188951952338 93% => OK
Determiners: 0.0562390158172 0.0887237588012 63% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0175746924429 0.0209618222197 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0140597539543 0.0139019557991 101% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2882.0 2387.08602151 121% => OK
No of words: 476.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 6.05462184874 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.365546218487 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.27731092437 0.251872472559 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.172268907563 0.174417080927 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109243697479 0.112833075102 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91438881599 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40756302521 0.524397521467 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.3637083942 59.2087087015 77% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.04 20.5533526081 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4864024169 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.28 120.699889404 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.04 20.5533526081 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.64 0.644075263715 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 46.771092437 45.7405998639 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.29411764706 1.45489161554 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400129734639 0.300154397459 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.170938779515 0.103427244359 165% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.109852803719 0.0752933317313 146% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.478180191249 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136473455648 0.151897553556 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157491404047 0.114077575197 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0941334569939 0.0781384742642 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.446962419091 0.336927656856 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.041039079898 0.067059652881 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305111124075 0.210909579961 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310766105179 0.0618886996521 50% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 18.0 8.42114695341 214% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 13.6433691756 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.