"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The vice president of the food distribution company tries to find the best solution for the food storage. He or she assumes that the new company, which is called Fly-Away Pest Control, is not good enough, because they received the considerable damage from the pest at warehouse that is served by this company. The author of the passage thinks that the most appropriate decision is to return to the previous company. Probably, the proposed measure is quite reasonable, however, the argumentation needs more additional evidence to be sure about the text conclusion. Otherwise, the company ventures to make a wrong decision.
The first moment that lacks certainty is about the period of cooperation with the Fly-Away Pest Control company. The author states that the contract was signed recently, but he or she does not specify when it the contract signed exactly. Perhaps, the contract signed six months ago and during this persiod the food was in the total safety. However, the author mentions only about the last mounth when pest destroyed 20 000 dollars worth. Hence, in order to be sure that the Fly-Away Pest Control company is not so reliable in the question of food safety; the author should provide more statistic data of the all period of cooperation. In this case, it would be clearer that Fly-Away Pest Control Company is not efficient.
The author compares warehouses in two different citie: Palm city and Wintervale. There is no doubt that the text lacks a lot of necessary information about these towns. In order to be sure that Fly-Away Pest Control Company is not so good it is reasonable to compare the weather conditions in two cities. Probably, Palm city has quite high level of humidity and it provokes pest to be more aggressive. While Wintervale city, where Buzzof Pest Company serves warehouses, could have the dry climate where pest is not so numerous and dangerous. Hence, the author should provide enough evidence that these two different cities have the same weather conditions. Only in this case, the argument will be valid.
Probably, the main point that should be supported by additional evidence is what kind of pests cause the damage. Perphaps, the last mounth in Palm city was extremely humid and new insect attacked the warehouse. While the Fly-Away Pest was not responsible for this kind of insects. Hence, this moment should be clarified.
To sum up, the author hurries to make the conclusion to discard Fly-Away Pest company, because of its low effeciency. However, the author does not provide enough evidence to be sure about his conclusion. Hence, it would be more advantageous to support the argument by additional evidence.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Perhaps, the contract signed six months ago and during this persiod the food was in the total safety.
Error: persiod Suggestion: period
Sentence: However, the author mentions only about the last mounth when pest destroyed 20 000 dollars worth.
Error: mounth Suggestion: mount
Sentence: The author compares warehouses in two different citie: Palm city and Wintervale.
Error: citie Suggestion: cities
Sentence: Perphaps, the last mounth in Palm city was extremely humid and new insect attacked the warehouse.
Error: mounth Suggestion: mount
Sentence: To sum up, the author hurries to make the conclusion to discard Fly-Away Pest company, because of its low effeciency.
Error: effeciency Suggestion: efficiency
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argument 1 -- not OK. In GRE/GMAT, we have to accept all data or evidence are true. We may say: maybe the stuffs in the warehouse in Palm City are more precious.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. It can be put on argument 2. We may say: maybe the size of the warehouse in Palm City is much bigger.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 443 350
No. of Characters: 2164 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.588 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.885 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.468 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.72 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.672 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Thank you very much for the
Thank you very much for the evaluation.
However, I do not understand why my first argument is wrong, I do not argue that the given data is false. I just state that text does not provide the precise period of time. Is it mistake?
Could you be so kind to elaborate this point?
Thanks in advance!
P.S. I really appreciate your help)
You are welcome.
You are welcome.
here 'last month' means 'the damages in last month', doesn't matter when they signed the contract.
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'while', 'kind of', 'no doubt', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.271255060729 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.137651821862 0.15541462614 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0910931174089 0.0836205057962 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0668016194332 0.0520304965353 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0242914979757 0.0272364105082 89% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0931174089069 0.125424944231 74% => OK
Participles: 0.0141700404858 0.0416121511921 34% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.59361953696 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0283400809717 0.026700313972 106% => OK
Particles: 0.00202429149798 0.001811407834 112% => OK
Determiners: 0.117408906883 0.113004496875 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0161943319838 0.0255425247493 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0182186234818 0.0127820249294 143% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2676.0 2731.13054187 98% => OK
No of words: 443.0 446.07635468 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.04063205418 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.3769751693 0.378187486979 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.279909706546 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.20316027088 0.208842608468 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106094808126 0.135150697306 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59361953696 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 207.018472906 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455981941309 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 50.2684413683 52.1807786196 96% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 17.72 23.2022227129 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.009556693 57.7814097925 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.04 141.986410481 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.72 23.2022227129 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.724660767414 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 45.7109706546 51.9672348444 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.65486725664 1.8405768891 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346159277008 0.441005458295 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103607246361 0.135418324435 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0758629024916 0.0829849096947 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.54392363667 0.58762219726 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13788450687 0.147661913831 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134186547477 0.193483328276 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703487941621 0.0970749176394 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.452895271885 0.42659136922 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.146731251759 0.0774707102158 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236534367976 0.312017818177 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655758335388 0.0698173142475 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.87684729064 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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