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The question is that busy parents should spend their rest time to have fun playing games or sports with their children, or it is better to use that time for revising their children's schoolwork. In my vantage point, having fun can have more effect on children's mind. In fact it can help to children to exploit their abilities best. My arguments and reasons are listed as below which will strengthen my point of view:
First, since this type of parent is always tired; consequently they need to be happy in their free time. Playing with children will provide such an opportunity for them to charge their gone energy. On the other hand if busy parent spend time for evaluate children's homework, they may show negative reaction with the smallest mistake in children's schoolwork because of being torpid. For instance my mother was nurse and always busy. After returning home, she was trying to sleep and in her rest of time was considering our homework. I hate to remember that she was getting angry even for our bad handwriting because of excessive tiredness, whereas if she had spent time for happy and playing with us, definitely she could have refreshed her soul.
Second, interfering in children’s schoolwork is not appropriate totally. The parent should create a free circumstance for their studying. I mean when children feel a compulsive force toward them in related with the study, they will behave vice versa. If children do not confront with the pressure of their family, the school and study will be favorable for them.
Third, the studies have recently shown that the play can reinforce other aspects in children. It can cause children to improve their mind’s performance and even more children will be able to provide creative ideas. The play have great impact on growing of brain, subsequently children can become a mature person faster.
As I have illustrated, spending time for playing have numerous advantages for children. In fact the parents can give them a chance for receiving positive energies in the world; as a result they broaden their performance in any ground.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 229, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ble to provide creative ideas. The play have great impact on growing of brain, subse...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'whereas', 'for instance', 'i mean', 'in fact', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.24427480916 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.173027989822 0.158761421928 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0737913486005 0.0866891130778 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0356234096692 0.046263068375 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0941475826972 0.0685040099705 137% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.137404580153 0.118717715034 116% => OK
Participles: 0.058524173028 0.0351676179071 166% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59479572025 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0254452926209 0.0309702414327 82% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0534351145038 0.0887237588012 60% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0381679389313 0.0209618222197 182% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00508905852417 0.0139019557991 37% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2099.0 2387.08602151 88% => OK
No of words: 351.0 408.028673835 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.98005698006 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356125356125 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.259259259259 0.251872472559 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.179487179487 0.174417080927 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.111111111111 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59479572025 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549857549858 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 60.3132089695 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6279970672 48.84282405 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.611111111 120.699889404 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.777777777778 0.644075263715 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 45.4259259259 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.45378151261 1.45489161554 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0954929744292 0.103427244359 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0751698968403 0.0752933317313 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.502077952857 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133029701653 0.151897553556 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.25918983524 0.336927656856 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0344377875595 0.067059652881 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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