Nowadays, children are exposed to abundant computer games like Starcraft and dota which always take them a great deal of fun. Children are too crazy about them so that some claims that playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them. From my perspective, however, this point of view is arbitrary and not reasonable. Playing computer games is also a beneficial activity. My reasons and examples are given below.
Initially, by playing computer games, children can acquire abundant knowledge. As is known to all, to make themselves become more real, games are always consisted of up-to-date knowledge such as psychology, physics and biology. Players can learn the knowledge unnoticeably. Take the Call of Duty as an example, weapons used by the players really exist in the reality. If children start to play the game, they will be familiar with these weapons and be alarmed in the future. Additionally, the scene of the game changes frequently which allows children to have impression of these parts of the world.
Besides, children can learn how to work in groups. Many a computer game requires player cooperating with each other to face the challenge. To pass the levels, players have to work together and shoulder different responsibilities which cultivate their team spirit. For instance, there is a famous game called Minecraft. Players use different tiny blocks to build some things like tall buildings. Usually, it needs up to millions of blocks to build a palace which require hundreds of players work together to get it done. This kind of task will undoubtedly develop children's steam spirit.
Admittedly, I am not denying that playing games is a time consuming activity. Some believe that children who spending too much time playing games cannot do well in their school work and fail the competitive edge in the future. Nevertheless, I hold that not only an A-level student but also a talented player can be successful in recent years. Wings, a team of Dota, won nearly 10 million dollar as a champion in TI6. That's why I suggest that by playing computer games, people can also pave the way for the success.
In a nutshell, playing games is not a time waster. It is not only because children can extent their outlook and inject new passion and energy into life but also because they will be aware of what team spirit is which is significant beneficial for their future career.
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 65
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 9: Agree or disagree? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. 61
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 15, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...hildrens steam spirit. Admittedly, I am not denying that playing games is a time consuming ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...10 million dollar as a champion in TI6. Thats why I suggest that by playing computer ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, look, nevertheless, really, so, well, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9487804878 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62894812296 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534146341463 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3394920143 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.16 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281533114443 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082292177627 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875403692627 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164920436204 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0904738450394 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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