The first pie chart illustrates the composition of domestic energy consumption of an average Auatralian family. The second pie chart compares the percentages of carbon dioxide emission from six spheres of familiar activities, that are heating, cooling, lighting, other appliances refrigeration and water heating.
Overall, heating composes the largest section of Australian household energy use. Water heating emits the biggest proportion of greenhouse gas from family.
Looking from the first pie chart, it is evident that heating and water heating consume the majority of household energy, which is 42% and 30% respectively. Water heating generates 32% of total carbon dioxide emission, which is the largest section of greenhouse emission from family use. By contrast, heating merely engender 15% of greenhouse gas from household energy comsumption, which is insignificant when compared to the fact that heating consumes nearly half of househlod energy.
Turning to the second pie chart, it is surpising to conceive that other appliances emit 28% of the whole carbon dioxide that resulted from family, because other appliances only consumes 155 household energy. similarily, refrigeration causes 145 greenhouse gas from family activities, which merely consumes 7% household energy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'appliances'' or 'appliance's'?
Suggestion: appliances'; appliance's
...t are heating, cooling, lighting, other appliances refrigeration and water heating. Ove...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Similarily
...ces only consumes 155 household energy. similarily, refrigeration causes 145 greenhouse ga...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1106.0 965.302439024 115% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85185185185 4.92477711251 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84583299441 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513227513228 0.547539520022 94% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 283.868780488 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2378366937 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.888888889 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55555555556 5.23603664747 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 61.2550243902 54% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.65 11.4140731707 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 40.7170731707 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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