The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read costs only $500 per employee — a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
The personnel director recommend the president of Acme Publishing Company that if employee take course of Easy Speed-Reading, it will clearly help to make more productivity and it will make more profit than ever. It seems very logical at first glance, but it isn’t when it goes in detail
First of all, there should be an evidence that one graduate who was reading less than 500 pages report in two hours. If one of graduate learned from Easy Speed-reading, there should be an evidence that how was he doing before taking this course because if he read a little bit close to amount of paper he read after taking course, then there is no benefit from it.
Secondly, there should be question answered that what is the relative connection that reading productivity could give rising status of job position. Just because reading productivity increases, that doesn’t mean that people of Acme Publishing Company will give graduate better job status. Surely, graduate does better ideas than others or make project better than other people, so he made a promotion under a year. To make reading productivity connection with promotion better, then there should be an example that would be understandable why this is called a ‘good’ deal.
Furthermore, question should be answered that how many people are working in Acme Publishing Company? It will be valuable that having Easy Speed-Reading Course offered to all of the employee. Let’s be realistic, Since there is no statement about how many people are working in the Acme Publishing Company, it will be problematic if the money spent is overreached their assets. Thus, argument should require number of people who are in Acme Publishing Company.
Moreover, question need to be answered is what are the events that are in three-week seminar in Spruce City? If there any supportive ideas about improving reading productivity then it will help to understand president of Acme Publishing Company. However, since there is no evidence what kind of seminar would help to engender reading productivity, this would affect the argument negatively.
Conclusively, with all answers provide to the question above, the ambiguous recommendation will be better cohesive and logically understandable. Finally, this will help how president of Acme Publishing Company will proceed the decision.
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- College and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. 66
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...taking this course because if he read a little bit close to amount of paper he read after ...
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Line 4, column 27, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'questioned'?
Suggestion: questioned
...fit from it. Secondly, there should be question answered that what is the relative conn...
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Line 4, column 563, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ld be understandable why this is called a 'good' deal. Furthermore, ...
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Line 6, column 172, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ng Easy Speed-Reading Course offered to all of the employee. Let's be realistic, Sinc...
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Line 8, column 110, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e in three-week seminar in Spruce City? If there any supportive ideas about improv...
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Line 8, column 392, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s would affect the argument negatively. Conclusively, with all answers provide t...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30748663102 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91358104445 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475935828877 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1287261368 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0625 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312600007433 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107652371043 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691833852844 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158582868669 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051082269704 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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