IELTS Writing Task 1 - Example 9
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the total number of British people who emigrated to five different countries over the period 2004 to 2007. Overall what stands out from the chart is that Australia was the most popular destination throughout the time frame mentioned in the question.
With regards to Australia, although the numbers of visitors stood at just over 40,000 in 2004, the figure went up sharply to 52,000 in 2006, followed by a rapid drop to finish around 42,000 in 2007. Now, looking to Spain, having remained almost stable at 35,000 for the first two years, the figure declined to about 28,000 at the end of the period, which was still considerably higher than New Zealand, the USA and France. While New Zealand witnessed a gradual fall over the whole period to end at 20,000 in 2007, the USA experienced fluctuations around 20,000.
Turning to France, in 2004, the net number of British guests constituted almost 22,000. However, the rate increased significantly to nearly 35,000. Next, the country saw a rapid fall to just under 20,000 in 2007, making it the least number as opposed to remaining four countries.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 189 200
No. of Characters: 907 1000
No. of Different Words: 116 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.708 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.799 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 72 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 39 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.552 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, still, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 937.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95767195767 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51202978979 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656084656085 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7034958529 43.030603864 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.125 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.625 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.23603664747 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0935838225992 0.215688989381 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484634812884 0.103423049105 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344411528628 0.0843802449381 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0760536473148 0.15604864568 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296814641837 0.0819641961636 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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