New technology has changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In today’s world, children are enjoying their leisure in a radically different way, compared to those of any elder generations, thanks to innovative technologies. The society has sparked off a heated controversy over whether it is good or bad. Personally, I believe that this trend exerts a double- edged impact on children, which I will discuss below.
To begin with, people supporting technologies mention its ability to make children’s pastime more interesting. Indeed, thanks to their attractive designs and outstanding functions, it is not difficult for technical devices to mesmerize kids, of whom the desire of trying ecstatic things is inherent in their thoughts. Moreover, this amusement is of great use in promoting creativity by its excessive loads of motivation in thinking out of the box, such as formulating innovative strategy to win a game, or developing an application meeting their peers’ interests. In other words, new technologies help children foster their passion for future occupations, like software operating or internet security.
On the other hand, there are question marks over technology’s drawbacks. First, parents are worrying about its likelihood to support the sedentary lifestyle, which can lead to a variety of health problems, such as metabolism disorders, cardiovascular diseases or obesity. Furthermore, keeping their eyes at device monitors for a long time makes children suffer from refractive error. Another disadvantage is its ability to cause addiction, squandering children’s time, and making them neglect their main responsibilities. Therefore, the trend towards amusing by technology seems to be the major reason gaining many unprecedented problems in leaps and bounds.
To sum up, detrimental as it is, new technology remains acceptable for children’s free time, thanks to its outweighed advantages. It is predicted to be more useful in the future, provided that kids are well - educated and mature enough.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, as for, such as, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7138047138 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32370141958 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.686868686869 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.678611557 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.214285714 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252312301404 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078903179913 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719577941734 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146858599657 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343418961384 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.26 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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