first, the reading passage states that overhunting by native people could have been the main cause of extinction.however, the lecturer refutes this point and explains that steller's sea cow was a massive animals ,about 9 meter and 10 tons,so a couple of see cow could feed the entire village of siberian people,besides,the number of siberian people was not large,therefor they wouldn't need to hunt large numbers of sea cow.
second,the article claims that a disturbance in the ecosystem caused a decline in kelp populations,which is the main source of food for sea cow.in contrary , the professor rebuts that and he says that if any ecological changes happened ,these changes will not affect only sea cow ,it should affect other types of marine mammal like whales but was not there any evidence about a decline in whales populations.,
third,the article belives that the european fur traders are responsible about the extinction of sea cow.in contrast ,the lecture disagrees with this point and says that european traders were the last to arrive
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
first, the reading passage states that overhu...
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Line 2, column 204, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'animal'?
Suggestion: animal
...ins that stellers sea cow was a massive animals ,about 9 meter and 10 tons,so a couple ...
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Line 2, column 211, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t stellers sea cow was a massive animals ,about 9 meter and 10 tons,so a couple of...
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Line 2, column 221, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'meter' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'meters'.
Suggestion: meters
... sea cow was a massive animals ,about 9 meter and 10 tons,so a couple of see cow coul...
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Line 2, column 238, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...ssive animals ,about 9 meter and 10 tons,so a couple of see cow could feed the enti...
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Line 2, column 242, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun see seems to be countable; consider using: 'a couple of sees'.
Suggestion: a couple of sees
...e animals ,about 9 meter and 10 tons,so a couple of see cow could feed the entire village of si...
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Line 2, column 310, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , besides
...ed the entire village of siberian people,besides,the number of siberian people was not l...
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Line 2, column 362, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , therefor
... number of siberian people was not large,therefor they wouldnt need to hunt large numbers...
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Line 2, column 377, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...rian people was not large,therefor they wouldnt need to hunt large numbers of sea cow. ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
...ed to hunt large numbers of sea cow. second,the article claims that a disturbance i...
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Line 4, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...hunt large numbers of sea cow. second,the article claims that a disturbance in th...
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Line 4, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...tem caused a decline in kelp populations,which is the main source of food for sea cow....
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Line 4, column 156, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...n source of food for sea cow.in contrary , the professor rebuts that and he says t...
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Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... that if any ecological changes happened ,these changes will not affect only sea c...
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Line 4, column 280, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ese changes will not affect only sea cow ,it should affect other types of marine m...
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Line 6, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...decline in whales populations., third,the article belives that the european fur t...
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Line 6, column 116, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ut the extinction of sea cow.in contrast ,the lecture disagrees with this point an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, second, so, third, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 882.0 1373.03311258 64% => OK
No of words: 170.0 270.72406181 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18823529412 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 4.04702891845 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00614374953 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 145.348785872 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.658823529412 0.540411800872 122% => OK
syllable_count: 271.8 419.366225166 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 13.0662251656 15% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 85.0 21.2450331126 400% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.0 49.2860985944 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 441.0 110.228320801 400% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 85.0 21.698381199 392% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 32.0 7.06452816374 453% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 4.19205298013 406% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489064281648 0.272083759551 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.372826301733 0.0996497079465 374% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505301066724 0.0662205650399 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300507427707 0.162205337803 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887466469187 0.0443174109184 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 45.5 13.3589403974 341% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -14.8 53.8541721854 -27% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 5.55761589404 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 36.4 11.0289183223 330% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.01 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.4 8.42419426049 147% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.7273730684 266% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 36.0 10.498013245 343% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 36.0 11.2008830022 321% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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