Do you agree or disagree with following statement
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Financial mangment is very important topic today, as the money has a controll over everything in the world. It goes wiht out saying, learning how to save money and how to be self controled person, would be one of the essential skills that every one must have. In order to live in right way and prevent alot of troubls that might happend if people loss the control of their money. Despit of what being said, peronally, I think we have to keep the kids a way from any finantial issue, and it is not nessesory to deal with money in young age in order to be financialy responsible in the future.
kids are not concious about the important of money, they want to get everything, despit the price, If their parents try to explain the concept of money to them in way suitable to their age, for sure, that would be so helpfull for them to understand with out ruin their childhood, to illustrate this point, a famous Tv show recently disscuss this problem, they said parents should not tell their kids that they could not able to buy some thing to them. In turn, that would have a bad impact on them, that may lead them to feel unsafe and unsecure. Then, they would never trust there parents anymore. Therefore, parents have to say ( it is not the aprobarate time to buy this stuff instead of saying it is to expensive) by this way they can convince their kids, at the same time they convey a massage to their kids that they can not buy any thing whenever they want. Also they start to understant the meaning of money by using this indirect way.
Ideally, if the parents let their kids manage their own money in young age, they put their kids in risk of abuse this money. Furthermore, kids may have bad friends that encourage them to buy drugs, alcohol and alot of other harmfull stuff. The experts usually advice parents to protect their kids from all these troubles by decrease their access to money untit they get older, then , they can trust and rely on them. I remember when I was in high school, my friend be addicted because her parent used to give him money, they think it would be helpfull for her to manage her own money at young age.
Admittedly, leting the kids deal wiht small financial issue would be helpfull sometimes, if this process is under their parent supervision. Also, they may learn how and when to spend money, in addition, that would enhance their awarness about the importance of money, as well as, reinforcing their self-esteem and self- relying.
In conclusion, leting kids in young age dealing with money is unaccebtable, it would lead to dramatic concequence that may destroy the kids and the parents life. However, that may have some advantages but they do not worth the try. So in order to help kids be a succefull financialy,we can use many approaches rather than involving them in financial issues.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56496062992 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33642784921 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488188976378 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.2085946654 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.833333333 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2222222222 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203570493869 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740517480256 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571866828523 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132753668102 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342795063228 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.