It is undeniable that the government plays an crucial role in healthcare services. However, people have different viewpoints towards whether the government should invest into raising citizens’ awareness of healthy living or allocate health funds for the the unwell. From my perspective, I strongly agree that the government should devote their money and time to promoting healthy lifestyles rather than squander money on those who are suffering from terminal illness.
To lead people to live a healthy lifestyle is a huge challenge for many primary care practices. In the rural areas, many people fall prey to easily avoidable diseases mainly because they are not aware about how to prevent them. Therefore, enlightening people about a healthy lifestyle can remove the existence of many diseases from the roots. For example, ‘polio vaccine campaign’ has been conducted extensively, with the help of mainstream media as well. As a result, as of today, India is a completely polio-free country. If the clinicians of medical centres are encouraged to use educational tools to emphasize personal fitness levels and to promote fitness as the “treatment of choice” for all patients, the proportion of the sick people can be greatly reduced.
There is no doubt that there will always be a certain number of people who are ill and in need of treatment simply because they cannot afford it. The governments do have a certain fund for the fulfilment of this need, but practically speaking it shall put an unnecessary deficit in the money that could be used elsewhere. This is because the cost of treating any disease will always be more than the money spent on preventing it. Moreover, logically, the government can be accountable for the state of health of its citizens, but it cannot be held accountable for the diseases sustained by its people.
In conclusion, I’d agree more with the idea of the government spending a part of nation budget on promoting a healthy lifestyle.
- the bar chart below show the percentage of the population aged 65 and over in three countreis in 1980 2000 and prediction for 2030 73
- The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people Summarise the information by selecting and 87
- Many people believe that international sporting events can contribute to world peace while others argue otherwise Discuss both views and give your own opinion 77
- Some people argue that sports are essential for us Others think of sports as an activity for leisure time Discuss both views and give your opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience 67
- The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...is undeniable that the government plays an crucial role in healthcare services. Ho...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...thy living or allocate health funds for the the unwell. From my perspective, I strongl...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...thy living or allocate health funds for the the unwell. From my perspective, I strongl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21362229102 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9489680078 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582043343653 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8200046819 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.285714286 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284500203451 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904965572403 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546347949767 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168439997045 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231974599008 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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