In this modern and complex world technology play significant role. Although usage of technology is different some get benefits some misuse of technology. As in case of children people have different opinions, in my views i don,t agree with the statement that technology made children's less creative. The reasons are as follows.
The very first reason comes in my mind technology provides wide range of learning opportunities which were not available in past. Nowadays children's have access to internet which contain lot of informative material which opens the mind of children's and help them to create their own world. For instance, children's play many games helps them in studies and also increase knowledge. games drag the children'n attentions because they use animation and other latest technology which gives information about the engineering, science and arts any many other field of life in very early age. When I compare today's generation with my generation or with my parents young kids have more knowledgeable than me and my elders all this is because of technology.
Secondly, technology made possible for children's to communicate more then on languages which is big plus for kids to be more creative. Communicating with the people across the borders For example, if someone want to learn the art from others countries they just need to sit in sofa and take the online classes which were not possible in past. People now have access to national and international affairs and whats happening around the world all this because of technology . When kids look new things which inspire them to experience them and which creates new world in children's mind.
Due to aforementioned reasons, I firmly believes that technology have positive effect on children's which give chance them to learn more by using internet and others online sources, also they can communicate in many languages which is very effective in creative process.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20766773163 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73527391617 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555910543131 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0676489383 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.428571429 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.5376344086 506% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172596926638 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660593433879 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491609303335 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117482632798 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037873163553 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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