At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
It is argued that the benefits of having younger population are overwhelming their drawbacks. In my opinion, I believe the idea is true.
First of all, having a large number of young people is often equal to an extremely strong workforce. This workforce in many developing countries is the main driving force for their economic development. Also, apart from that, younger adults could work in harsher conditions that even the old with many years of experience could not force themselves to because of their health issues. Second, without many older people, the society could benefit more as well as there would be less social pressure on taxpayers. Since the money from citizens would not have to go to old people care programs or to maintain nursing homes, more could be poured into improving the quality of life by improving education programs, or the health care system, or even conservation programs.
However, there is always a dark side to a picture. As young people are known to be quite impulsive and not quite able to control themselves, the passion crime rate could climb up the ladder real fast. For example, a simple quarrel over some inconsiderable thing could be the ignition of a more dramatic fight, which could even lead to unforgivable crimes such as murders. Moreover, young people could not be compared to the old in terms of experience or manners. This could take an organization more time to train fresh younger staff in order to do a job left behind by another, which could make them lose some money as time is money in business.
In conclusion, while there is no doubt that older people have their perks, a younger population's advantages, in my opinion, could still outbalance their flaws.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...e idea is true. First of all, having a large number of young people is often equal to an extre...
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Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... people, the society could benefit more as well as there would be less social pres...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, well, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92096219931 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6037181833 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584192439863 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2451388081 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.153846154 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7692307692 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118557646829 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428006943744 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373376369677 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0620852456513 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252997440477 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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