Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Throughout history, in all civilized societies, the issue's of television advertising engendered copious controversies among people. Some people incline toward the opinion that television advertising have many benefit and children should watch them. However, some other may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that television advertising directed towards young children should not be allowed because they have many negative influence on them. As far as I am concerned, parents should not allow their children to watch advertising of television. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point supporting my idea is that television advertising has negative effects on children. Nowadays, the advancement of technology happen at a very fast pace and technology introduce many different program to community and One of this program is computer game. There are many violent computer game that television shows and if children find out about them ask their parents to buy them and this violent game in a long-term make children angry which harm their health. Also, television advertising show many junk food which children find delicious and attractive and when children watch this and they demand their parents to take them to this kind of place and it is obvious children are not mature and they keep demanding until their parents take them to place that serves junk food. Therefore, forbidding children form watching this advertise is a great solution.
The second significant point worth mentioning is that some television advertising show ugly attitude and children may learn this. For example, my little brother learns a attitude from a television commercial many years ago and when our family come to our house imitate this attitude and embraced my parents in front of their family. He learns to make a fart noise from a television commercial. Moreover, parents are busy and they have to work very hard to make money for their financial needs in this arduous life. Television always advertise cool matters which children love them and demand them and it is not feasible for parent to buy them.
To wrap it up, it is not proper for children to watch television advertising since it has many harmful on their behavior. Consequently, it is highly recommended that parents prevent watching television commercial. In fact, there are myriad of other reasons, challenging above statement, could be mentioned but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many benefits'.
Suggestion: many benefits
...pinion that television advertising have many benefit and children should watch them. However...
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Line 2, column 202, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...very fast pace and technology introduce many different program to community and One of this pr...
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Line 2, column 521, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun junk seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much junk', 'a good deal of junk'.
Suggestion: much junk; a good deal of junk
...alth. Also, television advertising show many junk food which children find delicious and ...
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Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
.... For example, my little brother learns a attitude from a television commercial m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, for example, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.275 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76086942828 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4183743456 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.222222222 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259017828675 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985025613802 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802862786524 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179802683126 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931103589313 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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