You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
Life is too short, and we need to be careful in making decisions. Many people want to build their house if they get enough money; on the other hand, others like to spend that money on making profits from a business. I believe that it is more advantageous to invest money in a business for securing the future life. I feel this way for few most important reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, from a good business, you can make more profit. If you are a wise man, I hope you will invest money in a business and most probably able to earn a lot. That money is a need for your future life. My elder brother's business example is a compelling life experience of this. After his graduation, he managed to save three lac take, and spend to a local business; he started a hardware shop in the village market. Since he did not need a house that time, and he had a lot of time in hand, he dedicated himself to the business. And only after six months, he makes more than what he spends on the business. Moreover, he loves his business, and continue till now along with his public service job. He established a charity fund for the poor village student. I think all of his success comes from his invest that business and I wish I could follow the same path.
Secondly, a business platform helps us to become more sociable. In a business, you need to be amiable, friendly, and trustworthy to the client; thus all are the prerequisites for being a respectable person in a society. A house can be brought in anytime if you have money, but it is almost impossible to start up business in your retard life. For instance, my boss is a very sociable person, and he is the president of many public clubs. Before his business prosperity, he was not popular at all; even he felt shy to communicate unknown person. But after starting his business forced him to be such good speaker and motivator. His success is really fascinated me, and I hope one day I also able to deliver my speech like him. Therefore, spending money practically very advantageous for everyone.
Finally, some people may argue that a house is needed to live. I believe that but it's not as important as having a shear in a business because if you have a site business you will able to buy your house in future. Moreover, I do not need a house right now as my father already give a one. So, I decide to spend that money to set up a geotechnical lab which is my dream, and I am sure that it will change my financial condition.
In conclusion, it is clear that spending money on a business is more important than spending money to buy or build a house. This is because a business will give back more money than what amount you invest, and because it will change our social status.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'take' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'takes'.
Suggestion: takes
...raduation, he managed to save three lac take, and spend to a local business; he star...
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Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...usiness you will able to buy your house in future. Moreover, I do not need a house right ...
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Line 9, column 253, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cause it will change our social status.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2255.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38715953307 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50262999636 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47859922179 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.86738351254 643% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7462250877 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5357142857 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07142857143 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212220038554 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599598876942 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649451168804 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137422581373 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428707242181 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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