Many people want to increase the amount of exercise they get in order to improve their health. Some people prefer to exercise alone, for example, they go walking or running. Some others prefer to exercise with a group of people like attending exercise classes or being on sports teams. Which do you prefer? Why?
Now a days more people take care about themselves, and by exercising try to maintain their health. Although many prefer to exercise alone without being desrupted by other presence, I, on the other hand believe exercising with a group is more beneficial. I will address the most discernible reasons why I feel this way in the following.
To begin with, people spend a lot of their time in their work office or in their university, thus they do not have enough time for exercising. Not only that, but also just a few people stick to their sport schedual when they exercise alone. When individuals attend exercise classes, because they pay for that, it is more possible to continue their class. Therefore, group exercising help them to stick to their schedual. My own experience is a good example of this. Last year, I decided to exercise in a park near my apartment to loos weight. At the first two weeks every morning I went to the park and running, but after that Idid not lose any weight and lost my motivation and give up. In my desperesion, I went to GYM in my neighbor, it cost me two hundred dollars. Although, I did not loss any weight at the beggining, but because of that money I did not give up and continued. After two month I saw it’s benefit, because I lose a lot of weitght.
Moreover, attending social activities is a best way to learn social skills, such as communicating or making new friends. Exercising with a group give people apportunity to learn these skills. Hence, when individuals exercise with other people, he learn how to communicate with others in propel way or how can make friendship. For instance, I had very limited friends before I attended that gym, honestly I had only one friend, because the lacke of some social skills. But when I exercise with other people in that GYM, they talked to me and asked me some questions about my personal life, and talks about their interest. After a while we became so close friends. I put my knowldege in to account and gradually started to conversation with my co-workers in my office place, and find a lot of friends in both my office and that GYM. Addmitedly, when people exercise with others, becasue they talk with each other they do not ntice how time passed by and they will exercise more.
In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe group exercising is better that alone exercising. This is because it helps them to stick to their schedual and do not loss their motivation, and because it provides them apportunity to improve their social skills.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
Now a days more people take care about themselves,...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...id not give up and continued. After two month I saw it's benefit, because I lose...
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...l life, and talks about their interest. After a while we became so close friends. I p...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, honestly, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68362831858 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64819497097 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488938053097 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4641353387 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0434782609 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.652173913 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73913043478 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384657547679 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111818666556 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106016108107 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235113121435 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700235740922 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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