Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Every day many events happen in all different parts of the world. People can access to them by different sources like internet, newspapers, and television. Some people believe it is good to know all news even they do not affect our life. While, others think it is not recommended to know everything, and it is some kind of wasting time. In my way of thinking, it is good for people to be aware about events happening around the world, in spite of it may have no effect in their life because not only does their acknowledge will increase, but also it may have future consequence for them.
The first reason that can be stated here is that informing about different events enhaunce the binesh. When people get infomation on different country, they can learn the reason of that event, or what consequence it have for that society. I became a experience for them; after that, if the same happen for them they would be ready to contract with that. For example, forty years ago, the Iran leadership was a dictator person, it stimulate the people to stand against him and fall him down then put a proper persone instead of him. Thirty years later, The same e for liby people. The events in Iran was a proper way for liby people that helped to figure out the results of their revolutions.
The second point that deserves some word here is that some events may do not have influence at the same time, but may have some consequences in future. One group of a community may make some desition that will have some affects in the future of other communities, so having information about that desition can help people to confront with the affects better, and lead it to a beneficial way. While, if they do not have enough information, it will be difficult to control its affects.
To summarize, there is not any harmful result on getting information on the different events around the world. These information increase people informations and experiences that may be beneficial in the future. Who do you think in not agree with this thesis.
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. 60
- TPO 34 80
- extended family is less important now than it was in the past 70
- A/D: “It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.” 76
- TPO 32 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended knowing'.
Suggestion: recommended knowing
...our life. While, others think it is not recommended to know everything, and it is some kind of wast...
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Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...n of that event, or what consequence it have for that society. I became a experience...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ence it have for that society. I became a experience for them; after that, if the...
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Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stimulates'?
Suggestion: stimulates
...an leadership was a dictator person, it stimulate the people to stand against him and fal...
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Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...me time, but may have some consequences in future. One group of a community may make some...
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Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'These informations'?
Suggestion: This information; These informations
... the different events around the world. These information increase people informations and experi...
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Line 7, column 213, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s that may be beneficial in the future. Who do you think in not agree with this the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, while, for example, kind of, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67688022284 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51176883988 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512534818942 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2886161182 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7647058824 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212049582216 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751051066706 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637269653126 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13842482568 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533974307774 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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