Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Nowadays, advertising is one of the most important method to persuade the people to buy the products. Therefore, this presents a competitive process and needs many efforts to get attention of the costumer to preaches the staff. Therefore, it is possible that advertisements exaggerate the product quality and I agree with this statement. and I think their point makes sense in many aspects.
First, unlike the past, there are wide range of products have been launched to the market and this lead to a consirable competition between the different company to sell their outputs. In this condition, advertising presets a wonderful method to convince people and this may be lead to some companies apt to exaggerate the properties of a product. For example, in my country, due to some problems, the quality of the car is greatly low and they cannot compete with the famous companies such as MBW and etc. Therefore, they always try to deceive people that they new products, for example, has the satey as much as a foreign car. However, this leads to some people accept this exaggeration and waste their money to buy it.
Another reason which is worth mentioning is that the companies usually spend a lot of money for advertising and expect at least these costs have been compensated through the advertising. For this purpose, they have to persuaded the people to buy their products.
All in all, taking all the reasons which I provided in the previous paragraph bring us to the conclusion that companies present great effort to convince people because of the compensation of the advertising cost as well as the competitive atmosphere.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, at least, for example, i think, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1367.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 273.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00732600733 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80467462183 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542124542125 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.283049212 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.916666667 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129039399619 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572556233609 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602034614555 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780111893214 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538176573162 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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