It is a debate between scientists that how many years did the bees have exist on earth and a theory claims they have been lived on this planet for two hundreds million years. The teacher believes that the reasons which have provided by skeptics are not convincing to reject this theory.
First of all, the main species that preserve fossil remnants of bees are a particular type of trees which may not exist in that period of time. The people who deny the existence of this insect in that era give the point about the preserved bodies which come back to hundred millions years ago and the speaker thinks it is not strong proof to remove this theory because probably the keeping plant of these bodies would not live in those years.
Secondly, we know that bees and flowering plants have a close relationship with each other and we know these plants have been appeared on our universe 125 million years ago which is in contrast with the theory. However the bees may live independently to these species in first stage of life and then evolving process could happen to them as a reason for cooperation with their flowering friends.
Furthermore, it is admitted that the fossilized structure in Arizona are without the spiral pattern in their chambers but we know that modern bees use this pattern as water proof material and the experiments on old fossil expose some ingredients which are responsible for the water proofing role.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...s that how many years did the bees have exist on earth and a theory claims they have ...
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Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...n lived on this planet for two hundreds million years. The teacher believes that the re...
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Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rejecting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: rejecting
...provided by skeptics are not convincing to reject this theory. First of all, the main...
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Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...pe of trees which may not exist in that period of time. The people who deny the existence of t...
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Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...the preserved bodies which come back to hundred millions years ago and the speaker thin...
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Line 5, column 212, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...o which is in contrast with the theory. However the bees may live independently to thes...
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Line 7, column 168, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...ow that modern bees use this pattern as water proof material and the experiments on old fos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1187.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 248.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78629032258 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35718163936 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560483870968 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 21.2450331126 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5318705277 49.2860985944 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.571428571 110.228320801 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4285714286 21.698381199 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.7142857143 7.06452816374 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121863539899 0.272083759551 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626064843806 0.0996497079465 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0215444872321 0.0662205650399 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768517036044 0.162205337803 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266115090866 0.0443174109184 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.3589403974 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.498013245 152% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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