In some countries, teenagers are allowed to do part-time jobs. Some people think it is a good thing but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In recent years, there has been a significant increase in the number of teenage temporary employees. While optimists view the trend as a societal development, critics believe it may accompany many drawbacks. In my view, working while studying is necessary to teenage students as long as careful supervision and guidance are provided by their families and schools.
In the one hand, it is argued that obtaining a paid job provides students with a number of benefits. Firstly, these youngsters have greater chances to gain real-life experiences, which bring them much more precious and practical values than any lessons at schools can. Indeed, by taking on duties at work, students are able to practice communicating in working environments, sharpen their problem-solving skills, raise self-awareness, as well as broaden their perspectives in life. Secondly, to students coming from lower class families, part-time employment is the best solution for their financial problems. A paid job after school can cover tuition fees, daily allowance, which allows them to pursue their academic pathway and alleviate non-academic burdens.
On the other hand, criticisms against working part time often stem from the concern that young undergraduates are possibly unable to maintain the work-study balance. In a great deal of recent research on the issue, there have been increasingly high proportions of students who drop out from schools due to working reasons. Moreover, it is reported that a sizable majority of undergraduates admit that they frequently lose much of their concentration on in-class lectures after long working hours.
In conclusion, students should be encouraged to expose themselves to the working life as a practical way to be well prepared for their future careers. However, I am convinced that this is only beneficial only when thorough guidance is provided by school authority and families so that students can manage learning and working time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 47, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... other hand, criticisms against working part time often stem from the concern that young ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48355263158 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98601418795 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628289473684 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9964864935 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.230769231 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3846153846 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0568623808225 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0229639985331 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250852914034 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0379826586624 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197565661147 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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