Computer games are considered one of the most important aspects in our children lives. Nowadays, we can find many computers games available at the market. Many schools can provide the children with computer games during the educational programs. I believe that some people with agree that computer games is a waste of time, while others might disagree. However, when it comes to me I strongly agree that computer games are very important for children and playing computer games is not a waste of time for two reasons.
To begin with, computer games help childeren to improve their skills, Recently, there is many computer games like puzzles games, math games and scientific games lunched in the kids market. Many kids can watch hundreds of games weekly which can help them to expand their horizon. For instance, my five years old daughter used to watch movies and play computer games everyday on her own tablet. I saw her last week she was playing a game that was asking her how many apples in the basker and she has to pick the right answer. So, she would able to learn how to count. Moreover, She used to watch other types of games like puzzle. In fact, after one year of playing these games I can see that she expand her harizon and her intelligent. Furthermore, playing these games gave her chance to think deeply which reflect postive on her personality. So, this experience taught me that playing computer games will help children to improve their skills and it is not considred as a waste of time. Moreover, that will reflect positive on their future.
In addition, playing computer games is very enjoyable for children. Many children prefer to stay home and play games with their friends because it is too much fun. For example, my cousin's son prefers to play succor ball games and play station with his friends at home every weekend while they are eating snacks and drinking some juice. In addition, her mam mentioned that he was so happy to has fun with his friends joking and sharing very good moments. Besides, she memtioned that she saw them used to arrange the next playing date on regular basis. On the other hand, she said that last year her son was losing his time watching very boring movies and he was unhappy, specially he was staying home by himself. As you can see, playing games is very enjoyable for children and it is not a waste of time.
In sum, I believe that we have to encourage our kids to play computer games even at home or at schools. This is because computer games help them to improve their skills and because it is so enjoyable.
- TOEFL T P O 34 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 70
- TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 70
- TPO 37- One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die. Some people suggest 65
- TPO 41 - integrated writing 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...staying home by himself. As you can see, playing games is very enjoyable for chil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65934065934 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26084954105 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450549450549 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1688853972 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9583333333 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259908305159 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974567105782 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065436600086 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183206801319 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045909804355 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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