Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
It is stated in the prompt that, the purported decline in deer population is the result of the deer’s being unable to follow their age-old migration pattern across the frozen sea. Additionally, argument is also supported by stating that increase in global warming trend to have caused the sea ice to melt and it’s blatant that deer cannot migrate from one island to another. However, before recommendation can properly evaluate some question must be answer.
To begin with, what if majority of deer are dying by starvation? Or what if some deer are dying due to growing with human population? Maybe, deer are moving from one island to another in search of food it is plausible that some of they are dying due to starvation which is the cause of decrease in the population of deer. On the other hand as human population burgeon, more number of construction are taking place due to that their area is decreasing day by day which is a caused of their decrease in number. If either of this case is true, then it is blatant that, conclusion drawn from the original argument does not hold water.
Moreover, what if more number of hunter has increased? Or what if demand of deer product such as skin has increased? Maybe, to exacerbate number of hunter has increased and if this is so, then, it is blatant that there is decrease in deer population. Maybe, deer’s skin and other its body product has come in demand in the market it is plausible that more number of deer’s is sacrificed for business. If this happens to be true, then conclusion drawn from the argument is attenuate and can be benighted.
Finally, what if report of local hunters is wrong? Or what if deer has already migrated to unknown area? As deer tend to migrate from one place to another in search of food it is plausible that they must have found some other location. If this is true then it attenuates the report generated by the local hunter as the local hunters are not aware of the new place where majority of deer’s has migrated. However, if this happens to be true, then conclusion drawn from the argument is false and can be ignored.
In conclusion, the reports from the local hunters, that support their claim, are dubious as well as erroneous. However, if all questions are answer and more evidence is collected then it will strengthen the report.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 1865 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.538 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.388 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.857 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 473, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'attenuated'.
Suggestion: attenuated
...n conclusion drawn from the argument is attenuate and can be benighted. Finally, ...
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Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment is attenuate and can be benighted. Finally, what if report of local hunters...
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Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r has already migrated to unknown area? As deer tend to migrate from one place to ...
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Line 7, column 510, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e argument is false and can be ignored. In conclusion, the reports from the loca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7104622871 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50449244419 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425790754258 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4873952693 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.55 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146221309045 0.218282227539 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474402444204 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568874635205 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0827927805574 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418742156514 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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