Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
The argument claims that the decrease in number of Arctic deer on islands in Canada’s arctic regions is due to the increase in global warming trends. Stated this way, the argument reveals several instances of poor reasoning and fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. On expanding the same premise, the author notes that global warming caused the frozen sea ice to melt and resulted in the deer’s being unable to migrate across the frozen sea. However, careful scrutiny of the assumptions reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s conclusion. Hence, the argument can be considered incomplete and unsubstantiated.
First of all, the author readily attributed the decrease in deer population is due to global warming. This is merely an assumption made without much solid ground. There could be several other factors responsible for the drop in the numbers. For example, hunting might have become more regular in the Arctic region. Deer skin and deer head is very popularly used at a lot of homes as a decorative item. More deer might have been hunted and killed for the very famous musk. However, the argument failed to consider this possibility and hence shows poor judgement.
Additionally, the argument failed to consider the possibility of decline in the vegetation available on the islands for the deer to feed on. If the deer have exhausted the vegetation and there has been scarcity of requirements for a healthy vegetation to be grown on these islands, it is very much possible that the deer simply did not have enough food to rely on. The author should check for this possibility by conducting a survey on these islands. If the argument has provided evidence for ruling out such possibilities, maybe then it could be a more convincing conclusion.
Finally, the author completely went past the probability of the arctic islands being a natural habitat for some other animals, especially deer predators. If the islands are rife with predators at least in numbers that outrun the deer numbers, then that would be a solid evidence for decline in deer population. A survey to check the biodiversity of the islands will help evaluate this possibility. It will help to make a more cogent case if the author had conducted such a survey and then ruled out the possibility of deer predators.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster his/her claim, the author must provide more concrete and thorough evidence, perhaps by analyzing the results of aforementioned surveys. Finally, it would be necessary to consider all the relevant factors that play a role in evaluating the reasons for decrease in deer population. Without this kind of knowledge, the argument remains unsupported and unconvincing at its best.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2298 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.942 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.697 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.74 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, at least, for example, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2386.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14224137931 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86634690155 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480603448276 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7315328419 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4166666667 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167717700902 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511850504416 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585685962627 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100960826354 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495533450544 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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