Argue 1. Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this manuscript, the author mentioned that the Palean baskets may not uniquely Palean. Although it may seem sound at first glance, but the lack of specific pieces of evidence leads me to question about this argument.
First, the author should provide the specific evidence that the particular distinctive pattern on woven baskets are made by ancient Palean people. Since it is long time ago, the crack or morphological change, for example by climate change, may induced on the woven basket naturally, not intentionally. Furthermore the ancient people possibly not have the skill of post-treatment on woven materials, the aging may easily affected to the woven materials. Even if the distinctive pattern was made by Palean people, it may not made by Paleans, but given to Paleans as present from visitors. Thus, the author should provide more concrete evidence about the relationship between particular distinctive pattern and the proof that the pattern was carved by Palean people.
Moreover, the author should suggest the specific evidence that the Paleans cannot cross the river. The author mentioned that the Paleans cannot cross the river because no Palean boats have been found. However, since it is far past, so the excavation of the boat, the woven material even used on the water, is extremely hard. In addition, the river in that time may not deep like nowadays in past. In this case, the Paleans may cross the river on foot. Therefore, the author should provide more credible evidence about the suggested fact that the Paleans cannot cross the river.
Lastly, the author should suggest the sufficient evidence that the Palean basket found in Lithos is originated from Lithos people, not Palean people. Since we did not know the situation of ancient times, we cannot hashly conclude about the life of ancient people. It may given from Palean people, or it is possible that the woven bakset may generally used in ancient time. Thus, the author should add the enough evidence that the Palean basket found in Lithos is originated from Lithos people to make his/her argument more sound.
In conclusion, although the suggested pieces of evidence can be interpreted as the suggested manuscript, but it is not the only conclusion that can be concluded from this pieces of evidence. In order to strengthen the argument, the author should give more specific evidences that can supplement the abovementioned questions.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1975 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.987 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.485 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.842 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.389 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 302, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...en basket naturally, not intentionally. Furthermore the ancient people possibly not have th...
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Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...in that time may not deep like nowadays in past. In this case, the Paleans may cross th...
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Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'give' or 'be given'?
Suggestion: give; be given
...bout the life of ancient people. It may given from Palean people, or it is possible t...
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Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...y conclusion that can be concluded from this pieces of evidence. In order to strengt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13924050633 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57220173379 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412658227848 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.545850708 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.842105263 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17372618515 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646121478682 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594726419699 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930936906494 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650102781899 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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