In this argument, the author claims that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. To substantiate this argument, the author provides the fact that archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos and there is a very deep and broad Brim River. However, the line of reasoning is questionable and the author has to provide more evidence to make the argument convincing.
First, the author has to provide evidence as to whether the Brim River can be cross by swimming. It is possible that the individuals who are proficient at swimming can cross the river without the help from boats. Without ruling out this possibility, the argument is unreliable since the "Palean" basket in Lithos can be transported from Palean manually.
Second, another piece of evidence is needed to determine whether there are Palean boats which has not been found yet. No Palean boats having been found does not mean that Palean boats do not exist and it is possible that Palean boats may be found in the future. Therefore, "Palean" basket in Lithos may be transported Palean by boat. The argument is questionable unless ruling out this possibility by providing further evidence.
Third, the most important evidence needed is about whether there was a deep and broad river in the prehistoric time. It is possible that there was no transportation obstacle in the prehistoric time even though there is the Brim River nowadays because of climate change. In this case, residents in Palean easily took woven baskets to Lithos. Therefore, the argument is unconvincing without ruling out this possibility.
To sum up, the author fails to substantiate this argument since the evidence cited cannot lend credible support to what the author maintains. To make the argument more convincing, the author has to provide more evidence as mentioned above.
- Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take 50
- People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences 66
- Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline students cannot be motivated by school or college alone 83
- Some people believe positive thinking has benefits while others consider it has drawbacks Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 11
- Some people want government to spend money on searching for life on other planets However others think it is a waste of public money when the earth has so many problems Discuss these two views and give your own opinion 78
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 298 350
No. of Characters: 1486 1500
No. of Different Words: 129 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.155 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.987 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.641 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.566 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.61 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...act that archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos and...
^
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...rst, the author has to provide evidence as to whether the Brim River can be cross by swimming...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, may, second, so, therefore, third, as to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 298.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25503355705 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00665897605 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44966442953 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.9515750811 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.875 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1875 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114838795411 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447892080247 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524838245298 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0645238688937 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521185621671 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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