ARGUMENT TASK
The city of Winston has two large department stores: Namen and Roscoe. Namen is known for its high-end designer fashions, while Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options. Both Namen and Roscoe are each considering opening another store in the growing suburb of Salem, where the population has grown over 50% in the last three years and where the median income is $75,000. Namen’s executives argue that as population and median income increase, people are willing to spend more money on clothing. However, Roscoe’s executives believe that the suburbs are more family oriented, and therefore their store will be more profitable than their competitor Namen.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author state that two large department stores of Wiston City: Namen and Roscoe are considering opening another store at suburb of Salem. Because the population of Salem has grown in the last three years and the median income is $ 75,000. Therefore, the statement claims that both stores will have more benefit, in comparison with one another. The author claim is based on a stated and unstated assumption that need logical evidence.
Firstly, Both the store is considering opening a new store in a growing suburb of Salem. As Salem population has grown over 50% and the median income is $ 75000. Here, the author has failed to mention about exact increment in population. Is population consist of wealthy citizens or it is an area of local workers as Salem is mentioned as a suburb. Further, it states that the median income is $ 75000. Is it calculated based upon the income of each citizen? it can also be an industrial area, which can be a large production to have such a huge amount of income. Based on this statistical data, where the author has not mentioned it specifically. It can be possible that both the store will be in benefit.
Secondly, the Author stated Namen's executives argue that people will be willing to spend more money on clothing because of the increase in population and median income. The author has failed to mention the type of citizens who live there. Choice and trend of clothing fashion can also affect sales of Namen store. Similarly, Roscoe believes that they will have more benefit than Namen, author assume that suburban citizen will be more family-oriented. The profit of Roscoe will depend upon how many families live, which is not mentioned exactly. Fact totally depends upon statistical data.
Hence, the Author has failed to mention exactly about exact population increment, type of citizen live and what are their monthly income
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 316 350
No. of Characters: 1516 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.216 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.797 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.423 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.632 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.011 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.368 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.477 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.042 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$75'.
Suggestion: $75
...st three years and the median income is $ 75,000. Therefore, the statement claims th...
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Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$75000'.
Suggestion: $75000
...grown over 50% and the median income is $ 75000. Here, the author has failed to mention...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$75000'.
Suggestion: $75000
...er, it states that the median income is $ 75000. Is it calculated based upon the income...
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Line 3, column 460, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... based upon the income of each citizen? it can also be an industrial area, which c...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 314.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99363057325 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61417333361 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496815286624 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3469859492 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.4 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7 23.324526521 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183760251376 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583278532202 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888500416719 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113544772549 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832385246297 0.0628817314937 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.3799401198 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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