The owner of the Movies Galore argument that reducing Operating expenses and reducing the old stock by eliminating all movies which are released more than five years ago leads to an increase in the profits. At first glance, it may seem convincing, but by intricating it there are some flaws and some questions need to be addressed and explained in order to implement the plan.
Firstly, the first question needs to be addressed is, whether implementing the same plan as usual which is implemented in last month in one of the stores in Marston could lead to profits? Without proper reasons behind it one can’t assume the same plan applies successfully in all remaining stores. Perhaps, Marston is a small town where most of the people are farmers and they may be not inclined towards movies, entertainment, and other related stuff. If they generally go to bed at 8-9pm there is no use of store operating till 9 pm So, storing close at 6 pm may eventually reduce operating costs. Own should consider all these facts accordingly, should research whether people are interested in entertainment and what type of environment they are leaving. Because, if another store is operating nearby companies who used to stay in the office till 8 pm. From morning to night, they stay in the office so, if the store operated from morning to evening then there is no use, indeed there may be a chance people come to shop after 6 pm only. Without considering all factors the owner can’t implement the plan in all remaining stores.
Secondly, whether reducing the stock by eliminating movies increase profits? Whether people should buy old movies videotapes or new depends on their interests. It may true most of the people tend to watch new movies but reducing the stock of old movie videotapes impacts negative remark on the store too. If a person comes and asks few movies which are released 15 years back but if it is not present in the store customer dissatisfies and the thing that this store has inadequate stock from next time he may stop to come to this store.
In conclusion, I would think that according to the above explanations, it fails to answer essential questions.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 374 350
No. of Characters: 1756 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.398 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.695 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.571 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.747 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83689839572 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66385987744 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532085561497 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.32960769 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.6 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9333333333 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0976842833858 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036635813142 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381286082341 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0599854343088 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467508126009 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.