"ON Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation , the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the Isalnd's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer.By limiting thenumber of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved by the nearby town Seaville last year, when seaville town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals"
The letter suggest that the number of accidents occuring in Balmer Island is due the the plethora of mopeds in the Island , and limiting the rentals of the moped is the best way to reduce the fatalities that occue due to use of the two wheeler. Here the author has left many loopholes that questions the conclusion given by the letter . Letter should have to be more precise to state such conclusion .
One of the many flaws is that , The author states that the population increase in Balmer Island is 100,000 during the summer months . Here , the author is not lucid about describing that the population found in Balmer Island is native to that Isalnd or number of visitors visiting the Island increases in the summer. Also, if there is increase in the population of the Island then there is no such suriety about the population uses the mopeds as their transportation mode. It might be the case that the population prefer to walk instead of hiring the mopeds , or take a public transportation.
Secondly, the letter asserts that the accident rate is high between mopeds and pedestrians. It is possible that the number of pedestrian in the Island is more as compared to the number of mopeds on th road . As, the pedestrian are more they can also be the reason for the fatalities occuring . One cannot simply blame the riders for the accidents occcuring on the road , pedestrian can be careless too.
Thirdly , it is given that the moped rentals have to curtailed because of the abundant cases of accidents . It cannot be predicted that by doing so the amount of mopeds found on the road will be reduced and eventually the accidents occuring will be reduced. There might be possible that the mopeds used are owned by the commuters of the Island and onlu a less amount of mopeds are rented from the reental shops.
Finally, the it is written that the policy of curtailing moped from 50 to 25 will reduce the accident rates by 50 percent because it was achieved last year by the Island next to it "Seaville". Here it is given that last year Seaville got 50 percent reduction in the accident rates but it is not mention about at what time in history it was implemented by that Island. If the implementation of this law is done long way in the past and those results are calculated last year and this law specifically is not much effective.
As, seen in the above argument about the loopholes and the main points that are left untouched by the author this ketter seems specious to me. Hence the author might have be more logical while writing this letter.
- laws should be flexible enough to take account of varous circumstance, times, and places. 50
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The letter suggest that the number of accidents occuring in Balmer Island is due the the plethora of mopeds in the Island , and limiting the rentals of the moped is the best way to reduce the fatalities that occue due to use of the two wheeler.
Error: occuring Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: occue Suggestion: occur
Sentence: Also, if there is increase in the population of the Island then there is no such suriety about the population uses the mopeds as their transportation mode.
Error: suriety Suggestion: surety
Sentence: It is possible that the number of pedestrian in the Island is more as compared to the number of mopeds on th road .
Error: th Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As, the pedestrian are more they can also be the reason for the fatalities occuring .
Error: occuring Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: One cannot simply blame the riders for the accidents occcuring on the road , pedestrian can be careless too.
Error: occcuring Suggestion: occurring
Sentence: It cannot be predicted that by doing so the amount of mopeds found on the road will be reduced and eventually the accidents occuring will be reduced.
Error: occuring Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: There might be possible that the mopeds used are owned by the commuters of the Island and onlu a less amount of mopeds are rented from the reental shops.
Error: reental Suggestion: rental
Error: onlu Suggestion: only
Sentence: As, seen in the above argument about the loopholes and the main points that are left untouched by the author this ketter seems specious to me.
Error: ketter Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 453 350
No. of Characters: 2050 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.613 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.525 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.429 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.821 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
The letter suggest that the number of accidents occuring i...
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Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...idents occuring in Balmer Island is due the the plethora of mopeds in the Island , and ...
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Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...idents occuring in Balmer Island is due the the plethora of mopeds in the Island , and ...
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Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...the the plethora of mopeds in the Island , and limiting the rentals of the moped i...
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Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...tions the conclusion given by the letter . Letter should have to be more precise t...
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Line 1, column 400, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...be more precise to state such conclusion . One of the many flaws is that , The a...
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Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...lusion . One of the many flaws is that , The author states that the population i...
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Line 2, column 132, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...land is 100,000 during the summer months . Here , the author is not lucid about de...
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Line 2, column 139, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... 100,000 during the summer months . Here , the author is not lucid about describin...
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Line 2, column 558, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...fer to walk instead of hiring the mopeds , or take a public transportation. Seco...
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Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ber of pedestrian in the Island is more as compared to the number of mopeds on th ...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...pared to the number of mopeds on th road . As, the pedestrian are more they can al...
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Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...e the reason for the fatalities occuring . One cannot simply blame the riders for ...
^^
Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... for the accidents occcuring on the road , pedestrian can be careless too. Third...
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Line 4, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...edestrian can be careless too. Thirdly , it is given that the moped rentals have...
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Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...cause of the abundant cases of accidents . It cannot be predicted that by doing so...
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Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...ented from the reental shops. Finally, the it is written that the policy of curtailin...
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Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ated last year and this law specifically is not much effective. As, seen in the ...
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Line 6, column 143, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...uthor this ketter seems specious to me. Hence the author might have be more logical w...
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Line 6, column 171, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ious to me. Hence the author might have be more logical while writing this letter....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 453.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64238410596 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60283115599 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421633554084 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4660690505 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.684210526 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8421052632 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31445003292 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101568512556 0.0743258471296 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095119025346 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155324338409 0.128457276422 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112354553009 0.0628817314937 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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