To better serve the international students being admitted to Darrington College, we should build a new cafeteria catering to the
students at subsidized rates. The current cafeteria is very old and serves only expensive items and dishes, a point that will surely deter
future international students from applying to Darrington College. Building a new cafeteria will prevent this from happening and will
certainly lead to a dramatic increase in the popularity of Darrington College. Moreover, a new cafeteria will help Darrington College to
justify an increased budget for educational improvement this year. Building a new cafeteria will therefore be a great step towards
enhancing the ranking of Darrington College.
The memo written states that in order to attract the international students in the Darrington College the cafeteria should be redevolped
and rates should be reconsidered as they are quite expensive however, the author seems to have made these decisions on the vague
assumptions and lacks the real number survey.
The writer of the memo says that to better serve the international students in the Darrington College we should built the new cafeteria
but instead there are many ways for serving students like providing good education quality, providing them with cheap residential
accommodation etc. He firstly should make a survey about how many international students are presently studying in the college
because ther might be chance that the ratio of localities and international students and is very low and redevloping cafeteria for such a
low number of students may not be a very profitable for the college administration.Furthermore, he says that builiding new cafeteria will
lead to dramatic increse in the popularity for Darrington college but , he should consider the fact that the popularity of the college is
determined by the quality of education, proffessors, educational content etc and not by the lavishness of the cafeteria. Although it may
be considered as one of the factor but it it is not of that importance as writer is stating it. The writer henceforth states that new cafeteria
will help Darrinton College to justify an increased budget for educational improvement this year and how is this even possible,
previously he says that food should be provided at cheap rates and how it will be possible to povide food at cheap rates and gain high
amounts of funds.This shows how complex the writer's thinking is.
It can be clearly seen that the writer has written a memo with assumptions having no clear evidence.He lacks the basic survey and is
hastily writting the memo considering that the only way to enhance the college ranking is building new cafteria.
- Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military. 59
- To better serve the international students being admitted to Darrington College, we should build a new cafeteria catering to thestudents at subsidized rates. The current cafeteria is very old and serves only expensive items and dishes, a point that will s 50
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or any other fields is by instilling in them a sense of co operation and not competition 50
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240469208211 0.25644967241 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.175953079179 0.15541462614 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0967741935484 0.0836205057962 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0439882697947 0.0520304965353 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0381231671554 0.0272364105082 140% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.123167155425 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.058651026393 0.0416121511921 141% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.12765863238 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0205278592375 0.026700313972 77% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.117302052786 0.113004496875 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0381231671554 0.0255425247493 149% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0117302052786 0.0127820249294 92% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1994.0 2731.13054187 73% => OK
No of words: 325.0 446.07635468 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.13538461538 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.57801047555 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363076923077 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.292307692308 0.287650121315 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209230769231 0.208842608468 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.156923076923 0.135150697306 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12765863238 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 207.018472906 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495384615385 0.469332199767 106% => OK
Word variations: 50.4614556622 52.1807786196 97% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 20.039408867 30% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 54.1666666667 23.2022227129 233% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 163.079138934 57.7814097925 282% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 332.333333333 141.986410481 234% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.1666666667 23.2022227129 233% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.5 0.724660767414 207% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 16.0 5.14285714286 311% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 83.3974358974 51.9672348444 160% => OK
Elegance: 1.63636363636 1.8405768891 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446273587631 0.441005458295 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.258292354681 0.135418324435 191% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.101837636598 0.0829849096947 123% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.873740883654 0.58762219726 149% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.252460501176 0.147661913831 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.270809389708 0.193483328276 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101624447344 0.0970749176394 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.149571361921 0.42659136922 35% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0863534226611 0.0774707102158 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188293581057 0.312017818177 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984015322261 0.0698173142475 141% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.87684729064 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 14.657635468 41% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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