The city of Winston has two large department stores: Namen and Roscoe. Namen is known for its high-end designer fashions, while Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options. Both Namen and Roscoe are each considering opening another store in the growing suburb of Salem, where the population has grown over 50% in the last three years and where the median income is $75,000. Namen’s executives argue that as population and median income increase, people are willing to spend more money on clothing. However, Roscoe’s executives believe that the suburbs are more family oriented, and therefore their store will be more profitable than their competitor Namen.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In city of Winston, there are two large department stores named Namen and Roscoe for clothing and they are competitor of each other. However, the both stores want to open another one in the suburb of salem to gain some profit from the increasing population of Salem.Before evaluating the argument, three questions need to be answered to decide whether the argument is reasonable or not .
Firstly ,though median income has been increased ,will the people of Salem is interested to pay their money in clothes?Perhaps,it might happen they want to enhance the other facilites of their lives.Or they might want to buy a new home ,a fancy car or leading healthy life style with extra money .Perhaps it might happen they are not interested in clothing at all let alone fashionable .In this case,if any of these become true ,the argument of Namen"s executives will surely be undermined.
Secondly,do all the growing people of Salem are interested to buy clothes? Just beacuse of the population has been increased, it does not mean they will buy more clothes. It might happen that there are other clothing shops in Salem from where they can buy their clothes .Or it might happen that they like to order their clothes from online which will eradicate their hussels to go to market. Or it can happen they do not want new clothes more often. If all of these become true ,then the argument of the executives will be seriously undermined.
Moreover, do all the suburbs of people are really more family oriented than other suburbs? It might happen that some of them are living on their own with their own money. Or it might happen they live separately from their family for work purposes .Their family might live in other cities or other towns. If this is the case, then the Roscoe"s executives argument will surely wear out .
In conclusion, the argument where it stands now, is considerably flawed because of proper justifications and numerous number of assumptions. If the executives can answer these questions with proper explantions and reasonings they might hope for expected profits from the both clothing stores in Salem in near future.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1725 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.675 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.372 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.408 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.6 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98060941828 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63603401597 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490304709141 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 109.999744898 57.8364921388 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.428571429 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7857142857 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.70786347227 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106592843353 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511154018224 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961681457189 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0818444410756 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865132835118 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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