"During the past year, workers at Butler Manufacturing reported 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than workers at nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. A recent government study reports that fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers are significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents. If we shorten each of our work shifts by one hour, we can improve Butler Manufacturing's safety record by ensuring that our employees are adequately rested."
The argument states that according to the government study, Butler Manufacturing should introduce shorter shifts to avoid accidents. However, the argument doesn’t consider some important factors like the nature of the government study, differences in the nature of jobs the employees perform in the two different companies, whether all the accidents are reported in the other company etc.
The government study claims that fatigue and sleep deprivation are significant factors in many on the job accidents. But it fails to mention what kinds of jobs fall under the categories of the study and if the study actually relates to the accidents reported in Butler Manufacturing. So to come to a decision we have to know in detail about the study performed.
The argument also compares Butler Manufacturing to Panoply Industries. But we don’t know if their employees perform same kind of job. For them to be comparable the jobs have to be similar in nature. Job nature in Butler Manufacturing may be more risky than that of Panoply Industries. Also,the argument fails to investigate the reasons behind the accidents in Butler Manufacturing. There might be lack of awareness among the employees, which leads to more on the job accidents. If that is the case, then employee training program on safety should be initiated instead of shortening work shifts.
Butler Manufacturing has more on the job accident reports than Panoply Industries. The situation could be that there are similar amount of on the job accidents in both places but many accidents are unreported in Panoply Industries. Again, we have to collect the data from the employees. There is no evidence that the shorter work shift is causing Panoply Industries less on the job accidents.
So there are factors which are not considered in the argument. Also, some things are not clarified to actually come to a decision about the measures Butler Industries should take. Therefore the argument is incomplete and more information should be gathered.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 327 350
No. of Characters: 1644 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.252 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.798 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.452 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 295, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ky than that of Panoply Industries. Also,the argument fails to investigate the reaso...
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Line 13, column 130, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...tuation could be that there are similar amount of on the job accidents in both places ...
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Line 17, column 181, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...measures Butler Industries should take. Therefore the argument is incomplete and more inf...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27777777778 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92010379487 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45987654321 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.1070567139 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0526315789 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2654290624 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954679602513 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105091932659 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153950868059 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835142142209 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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