"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
The following recommendation to the company's president by the vice president gives a strict indication to the prohibition on the use of internet by the employees at their workstations for their personal use like shopping or playing games. At a first glane the argument seems legitimate but upon a scrutiny it demands some additions and re-evaluation to modify and provide a better conclusion.
Firstly, the given recommendation that their should be an electric monitoring of employees' internet contain a serious flaw as it will intrusion in the privacy of someone's life. Though it is also true that at workstations employees must not indulge in their personal activities as it will harm the company's productivity. Therefore, for this problem, the company can put a limit on the internet usage of the employees and also, they can prohibit the usage of social networking sites and shopping sites as well. By this, the employees will not waste their time on other things and the company will also be benefited with increasing the productivity and profit as well.
Besides, the vice president also proposed punishments for not obeying the rules imposed by the company. This will backfire their own policy because the employees also want some freedom at their workstations as there will be a time when they might have completed their given task before the given guideline and need some recreational activities for relaxing, which is also important for an employee to increase his productivity in the work. For example, in Google, the company provides ample freedom to its employees and yet the company enjoys wonderful turnout. Thus, any company cannot impede its employees from their deserved freedom at the workstations.
Therefore, its pretty clear that vice president of climpson industries does not considered the rights of he employees and thus, demanded such a rude and harsh implementation. He sould re-evaluate his recommendations and think like an employee too, Like for the company, he should also think about the employees too. Thus, the given argument should not be considered for the proposed recommendations and therefore, must be re-evaluated.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 171, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ill intrusion in the privacy of someones life. Though it is also true that at wor...
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Line 4, column 81, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'consider'
Suggestion: consider
...esident of climpson industries does not considered the rights of he employees and thus, de...
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Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'of the employees'?
Suggestion: of the employees
...dustries does not considered the rights of he employees and thus, demanded such a rude and hars...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.24 0.25644967241 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.133333333333 0.15541462614 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0613333333333 0.0836205057962 73% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0693333333333 0.0520304965353 133% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0613333333333 0.0272364105082 225% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.125333333333 0.125424944231 100% => OK
Participles: 0.04 0.0416121511921 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.01037343965 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0133333333333 0.026700313972 50% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.130666666667 0.113004496875 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.04 0.0255425247493 157% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00533333333333 0.0127820249294 42% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2159.0 2731.13054187 79% => OK
No of words: 345.0 446.07635468 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.25797101449 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.359420289855 0.378187486979 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.307246376812 0.287650121315 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.252173913043 0.208842608468 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.159420289855 0.135150697306 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01037343965 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 207.018472906 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484057971014 0.469332199767 103% => OK
Word variations: 49.9283752361 52.1807786196 96% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.039408867 65% => OK
Sentence length: 26.5384615385 23.2022227129 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3608012415 57.7814097925 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.076923077 141.986410481 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5384615385 23.2022227129 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.846153846154 0.724660767414 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 57.2630992196 51.9672348444 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.53535353535 1.8405768891 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30142294991 0.441005458295 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145474149051 0.135418324435 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0653695659415 0.0829849096947 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.627539893219 0.58762219726 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0892385535651 0.147661913831 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140740000875 0.193483328276 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610318791086 0.0970749176394 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.42713274594 0.42659136922 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0684465422972 0.0774707102158 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214641471239 0.312017818177 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469941734145 0.0698173142475 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 9.0 14.657635468 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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