The city council of Smithville believes has suggested to modify the police procedure to improve the visibility of the policy force. The author affirms that these improvements would significantly lower the crime rate in Smithville and make its citizens free. However, the author relies on unsupported assumptions about how would made this change to reduce the crime of rate. Therefore, the argument is fundamentally flawed and unconvincing.
Firstly, the author assumes that more police officers would reduce the crime rate. In fact, the author does not explain how a increasing of police officers would abate the crime rate. He does not specifies if, before the crime rate were rising because there were not enough police officers. Also, perhaps the old police officers were not qualified and these news police, may be have received a particulary training on how to arrest the thieves? However, it is not evident to confirm that this evidence. What are the strategies of police officers to give a confidence on a safety to citizens? How would be added? The author does not mention if the number would be efficace.
Secondly, the author testify that budgeting more funds for police overtime. Perhaps, police officers were not paid on overtime and crime rate were increasing day per day. Also, these funds could help to take the guards and put them in each quarter. We are not sure that this rising of funds would satisfy police officers because the author does not ask them. Maybe, these funds are for the specific police officers who usually have these skills to arrest the thieves and these amount are as plus value.
Thirdly, the author affirms that it is better for officers to patrol more often on foot rather than from their patrols cars. Maybe the area where there is crime, is not far from the office police. Or, sometimes, the city council noticed that when officers take cars to patrol, they do not do and crime rate rise. How would officers patrol ? And the author does not show how walk would impact for reducing crime rate?
As a result, the city council has to convince citizens that the police force and changing patrol procedures are advantageous for them to fight crime. And this memo has to need to show how the council arrived at this decision.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1831 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.756 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.29 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.042 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.941 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested modifying'.
Suggestion: suggested modifying
...city council of Smithville believes has suggested to modify the police procedure to improve the vis...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 330, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...unsupported assumptions about how would made this change to reduce the crime of rate...
^^^^
Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n fact, the author does not explain how a increasing of police officers would aba...
^
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'specify'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: specify
...would abate the crime rate. He does not specifies if, before the crime rate were rising b...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'specify'
Suggestion: specify
...would abate the crime rate. He does not specifies if, before the crime rate were rising b...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'officer'
Suggestion: officer
...o not do and crime rate rise. How would officers patrol ? And the author does not show h...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, as to, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90649350649 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36587510869 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472727272727 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7410809897 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.7083333333 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0416666667 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189465999213 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062746937722 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867141079523 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140907617091 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846004351789 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.3799401198 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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