The following appeared in a letter to the city council of Canbury from the president of Plexma Motors.
"I am pleased that the council is considering Plexma's plans to open a new manufacturing site in Canbury next year. In addition to our regular line of cars, Plexma has also begun designing and testing a line of automated self-driving vehicles. In a recent survey conducted by local media, 60 percent of Canbury's residents reported that they would purchase a Plexma self-driving vehicle in the future if they were confident in the vehicles' safety. We are happy to report that last summer, we tested our new line of self-driving vehicles in downtown Canbury with great success. Not only did our five tested vehicles remain accident-free for two months during testing, but in a survey conducted after testing, 90 percent of Canbury's residents reported that when they were downtown and our vehicles were in operation they felt very safe. Because steady demand for our self-driving vehicles will create new jobs and thereby greatly benefit Canbury's economy as a whole, I recommend that you vote to allow Plexma to begin manufacturing and selling these vehicles in Canbury."
The president of Plexma motors concludes that they should be allowed to start manufacturing and selling vehicles in Canbury. His assertion is based on positive responses they had received on survey and that their self driving vehicles will create new jobs. However, the author's conclusion relies on several unfounded assumptions, that if not substantiated, dramatically weakens the persuasiveness of the argument. He should address the following three questions.
First of all, are the people surveyed representative of majority of Canbury's residents? It is possible that the survey received responses from a small group of people, say a couple of hundred responses, in a city with millions of residents residing. Thus the survey might not be able to capture the correct opinion of the vast majority of residents. Further it is possible that the positive responses they have received for buying self driving cars are from technology enthusiasts, which only correspond to a very small fraction of residents. If this is the case, their sales may not be as high as they might have projected.
Second of all, are the new jobs created by self driving cars more than the number of jobs it will replace? It is possible that majority of the residents in Canbury might not be qualified for manufacturing jobs. Perhaps Canbury's residents are mostly working in service based jobs and might not be suitable for the new manufacturing jobs that might be available in the Plexma's plants. Even if we assume that many residents are qualified for those jobs, it is possible that people from nearby towns and cities may also be attracted with the same job prospects, which may lead to lesser number of opportunities for Canbury's residents. Further, it is possible that the number of job losses that the self driving cars may induce, jobs such as drivers, may be more than the number of jobs it might create in its manufacturing unit. If any of these scenarios is true, residents may not want the manufacturing plant in their city.
Third of all, what will be the impact on environment by the manufacturing plant? It is possible that constructing a factory may require large areas which may be only available by clearing off forest areas near by the city. Perhaps residents may not be in favour of doing so, as the forests might be vital for controlling the already polluted city. Further it is possible that the manufacturing plant might require disposing chemicals and noxious gases, and many residents may not be okay with this as this may hamper with their health significantly.
In conclusion, the author needs to answer the above three questions, so that the viability of his argument of constructing a manufacturing plant in Canbury may be further evaluated.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 457 350
No. of Characters: 2250 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.624 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.923 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.804 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.218 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...cles will create new jobs. However, the authors conclusion relies on several unfounded ...
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Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ty with millions of residents residing. Thus the survey might not be able to capture...
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Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
... available by clearing off forest areas near by the city. Perhaps residents may not be ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, third, thus, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 457.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03501094092 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8660847882 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428884026258 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4003036428 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.05 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.85 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10634329375 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412186450768 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378785142678 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0661102684249 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307166100132 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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