The given recommendation to lessen the number migrants going out of state is not very agreeable. It has not provided any evidences properly to the conclusion drawn. The relation between cause and effect should be clearly stated.
Destruction of public property is occurring, but who is responsible for that? Were there some destroyers who are not belonging to the state? What motive did they have while destroying public property? Was the public property too old and needed a proper maintenance? All these questions are not addressed in the paragraph.
It had been observed that more people are moving out of state, what was the reason behind leaving the state? Was there any economical crisis? Were they moving to take any higher education? Were there any issues like drought, flood scarcity of other daily resources is not mentioned in the given paragraph . It should have been stated properly to reach the conclusion drawn.
The relation between cause and the effect is not established. There is no good relation found between people leaving the state and damage and destruction of the public property. How these migrants are considered responsible to the increased cases of vandalism.
Since all there are many gaps in establishing a reason between the given cause and effect it weakens. So it the recommendation given is not likely to have a proper or rather predicted result. It is observed that the analysis of people leaving the state is not done perfectly, it should done before jumping down to any conclusion reached in the given passage.
- The following appeared in a memorandum from administrative head of the international students activities at Rydell College To better attend to the needs of the international students being admitted to Rydell College we should build a new dining hall that 67
- The most ideal path for a society to set up its youngsters for positions of authority in government industry or different fields is by imparting in them a feeling of collaboration not rivalry Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you a 16
- The following appeared in a note from a sedan owner to a friend Of the two top brands of cars introduced in past year Kia cars are clearly more superior to the competing Alfa cars Kia cars boast aesthetically pleasing design and a fuel economy of 50 kms p 50
- Policies that focuses on protecting environment should not be imposed on multinational organizations as they generate profit and boost the economy even though they cause damage to the environment 58
- Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reasons on which that claim is based CLAIM The value of integrating different disciplines in a curriculum is overestimated in the present times REASON E 50
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 256 350
No. of Characters: 1265 1500
No. of Different Words: 127 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.941 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.61 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.49 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.158 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.042 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...or that? Were there some destroyers who are not belonging to the state? What motive did they have...
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Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...behind leaving the state? Was there any economical crisis? Were they moving to take any hi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... is not mentioned in the given paragraph . It should have been stated properly to ...
^^
Line 5, column 375, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...properly to reach the conclusion drawn. The relation between cause and the effec...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 287, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have done' or 'do'?
Suggestion: have done; do
... state is not done perfectly, it should done before jumping down to any conclusion r...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 256.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09375 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70678997829 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.8473053892 57% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.5080707727 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.6315789474 119.503703932 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.4736842105 23.324526521 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 0.736842105263 5.70786347227 13% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0897751244867 0.218282227539 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0300576827328 0.0743258471296 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383028304494 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0519829627007 0.128457276422 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392640847112 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.65 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 12.3882235529 40% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.1389221557 65% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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